Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past.
Since the beginning of this century, in all distinctive civilized societies, it has been a very controversial argument among individuals or even intellectuals, through which numerous conflicts has engendered. Some people are inclined toward the opinion that nowadays because of technology children have became less creative than they were in the past while others consider this issue in a whole diverse perspective. Although an absolute conclusion cannot be made, in spite of all opposite attitudes, I strongly concur with the idea that children today are growing into less creative persons because of technology development. The outstanding reasons for my opinion would be explored below.
To begin with, today, children dedicate their time to play a video game rather than to read a book, so they have less time for thinking or creating something. As a matter of fact, children in the past hadn't have much access to video games. Therefore, they had less options to fulfill their leisure time, and they usually chose to read a book or create a new game on their own. Although children today seem to be smart but their imagination has not been developed just as well as the children of earlier eras. From my personal experience, I can remember once me and my younger brother were being bored, so we decide to invent a new game. Consequently, we came up with the idea of a new game, called, bamboozeld. It was so fun.
In addition to less time for thinking and imagining, children can use the internet for solving their problems or writing their essays. For example, in the past when there was no internet kids would work so hard on their home works. However, today children have access to anything needed. They often use the internet for not only writing their essays but also for solving every problem they have to cope with in real life. For example, my niece always copies others' essays for her school. Despite her I was enjoying writing my own essays.
Apart from the points I made above I have another reason that I would like to discuss about. Children in the past tended to spend much more time with their friends but today they almost prefer their video games to everything. My point is that when children work or play together as a team the creativeness of them as individuals is going to increase as a result of cooperating with other children. In fact, they learn a lot from their peers; however, now that they don't spend as much time as they did in the past not only do their creativity decrease but also their social skills reduce.
By way of conclusion, based on the arguments explored above I strongly agree with the idea that children today have become less creative as a result of advances in technology.
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Discourse Markers used:
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.223938223938 0.229887763892 97% => OK
Verbs: 0.167953667954 0.158761421928 106% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0656370656371 0.0866891130778 76% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0694980694981 0.046263068375 150% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0849420849421 0.0685040099705 124% => OK
Prepositions: 0.144787644788 0.118717715034 122% => OK
Participles: 0.0482625482625 0.0351676179071 137% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.55356030078 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0289575289575 0.0309702414327 94% => OK
Particles: 0.0019305019305 0.00188951952338 102% => OK
Determiners: 0.0752895752896 0.0887237588012 85% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.011583011583 0.0209618222197 55% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.011583011583 0.0139019557991 83% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2732.0 2387.08602151 114% => OK
No of words: 471.0 408.028673835 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.80042462845 5.86048508987 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65859790218 4.48200974243 104% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.316348195329 0.338922669872 93% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.242038216561 0.251872472559 96% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.174097664544 0.174417080927 100% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0700636942675 0.112833075102 62% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55356030078 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507430997877 0.524397521467 97% => OK
Word variations: 58.8648814966 59.2087087015 99% => OK
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6684587814 106% => OK
Sentence length: 21.4090909091 20.5533526081 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.5317644192 48.84282405 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.181818182 120.699889404 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4090909091 20.5533526081 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.818181818182 0.644075263715 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.54480286738 72% => OK
Readability: 45.6129125651 45.7405998639 100% => OK
Elegance: 1.29341317365 1.45489161554 89% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.351970506873 0.300154397459 117% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.088777010524 0.103427244359 86% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0757382811877 0.0752933317313 101% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.487543281919 0.497263757937 98% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.189852991835 0.151897553556 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115840599643 0.114077575197 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0796245121205 0.0781384742642 102% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.260288349587 0.336927656856 77% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0444449552474 0.067059652881 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.234648367862 0.210909579961 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0695555565874 0.0618886996521 112% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8870967742 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.86379928315 129% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.91756272401 61% => OK
Positive topic words: 12.0 8.42114695341 142% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 2.4623655914 162% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.75985663082 72% => OK
Total topic words: 18.0 13.6433691756 132% => OK
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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