Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.

Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Television are the important means of communication which has enormous power to influence people through it's advertisement and different programs. These programs and advertisement should be carefully scrutinized for it's content so that it can impart a positive change in any age group of people. Some people agree that television advertising should not direct towards the lower age group (2-5 yrs), others disagree. In my opinion, television advertising can be directed to even lower age group because of mainly following two reasons.

First, it is the nature of television's agencies and companies' policies how they regulate their advertisement. A good advertisement can also impart awareness in people about their children's health, education, nutrition etc. Most of the people in rural areas where there is no other reliable means of communication and information and mostly in those families in which parents are not so literate, television plays an important role in sharing the useful information and knowledge regarding their children's health, nutrition, education through advertisement. For example; an illiterate family in a rural village can know about the necessity to give vaccine against different disease to their child in correct time after watching advertisement related to vaccines to children in the television and they will act accordingly. Realizing this importance of these advertisements, they should be carefully examined for their content so that they can create positive impact to low-aged population.

Second, as like to the parents, television also can create positive influence to the children directly through their advertisement. A well focused advertisement on developing children's capacities on different aspects of their lives can play a direct role in developing the children positively. Although an advertisement focusing on an young child can create a risk towards negativity, it solely depends upon the reliability and credibility of those advertisement. So, an authentic and a well checked advertisement will always help in creating positivity towards developing a child's capacity. For example; a child can learn about good hygiene like washing their hands before and after their meal just after watching an advertisement of soap-showing washing hands before and after a meal.

To conclude, a television can be an effective source of communicating information towards parents and children through their advertisement, if advertisements are well examined before delivering.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider using third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
Television are the important means of communication wh...
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Line 5, column 333, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
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Line 5, column 444, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this advertisement' or 'those advertisements'?
Suggestion: this advertisement; those advertisements
...upon the reliability and credibility of those advertisement. So, an authentic and a well checked ad...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, first, if, regarding, second, so, then, well, for example, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 8.0752688172 297% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2141.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 375.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.70933333333 4.8611393121 117% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.23066859265 2.67179642975 121% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.493333333333 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 685.8 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.51630824373 119% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 59.6852485032 48.9658058833 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.733333333 100.406767564 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 20.6045352989 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.06666666667 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.188413664167 0.236089414692 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0854856552522 0.076458572812 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.05968672713 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139507220102 0.150856017488 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.061330402874 0.0645574589148 95% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.0 11.7677419355 153% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 29.18 58.1214874552 50% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 6.10430107527 213% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 10.1575268817 152% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.13 10.9000537634 148% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.002688172 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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