Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.

No one can cast a shadow of doubt on the impotance of the role which extended familiy played in the traditional society. A controversial question which is raised in this area is what factores lead to a substansial change in todyas' families? Some peolpe believe that extended family currently exist; however, I disagree. I believe that urban life style, small flats, and technological advancements caused a fundemental change in the family structure, which is now is very small, without the extend members of the family.

First and foremost, it is established beyond doubt that the primary reason for the decline of the extended families is the urban life. These days people live in small flats in the differents part of the city. Based on approximity to the work location, people choose their apartment. Financial bariers are more significant in the selection of the people as well. In the past people would work together in most cases; also, the scale of the city was very tiny. On the other hand today cities are expanded incontrolably; as a result individuals live iv various parts of the city far from the relatives.

The other equally significant reason which I like to present is the effects af advances in technology which makes the extended families obsolete. A noteworthe social research which was conducted in our country indicates that with the introduction of the video calls, people are less inclined to have face to face meetings with family members. They asserts that busy lifestyle inforce us to be satisfied with the skype chats.

Last but not least, modern lifestyle makes people to think about themselves frequently. Although in the past people could meke the weekends free for visiting the the family member, today majority of the individuals work at the week end to obtain more money.

To sum up, cosidering all the mentioned reasons, I think it is crystal clear that todays' lifystyle is completely different with the traditional ones. Modern lifestyle, busy work conditions, financial bariers are among the most evident reasons that make extended families out of date.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...re, which is now is very small, without the extend members of the family. First and f...
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Line 5, column 153, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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Suggestion:
...ies is the urban life. These days people live in small flats in the differents pa...
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Line 9, column 349, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'They' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'assert'
Suggestion: assert
...face meetings with family members. They asserts that busy lifestyle inforce us to be sa...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...uld meke the weekends free for visiting the the family member, today majority of the in...
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Line 13, column 159, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...uld meke the weekends free for visiting the the family member, today majority of the in...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, well, i think, as a result, in most cases, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 13.8261648746 22% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 43.0788530466 46% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1766.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 345.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11884057971 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3097767484 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71664878744 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.573913043478 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 556.2 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.3167390344 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.882352941 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2941176471 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.23529411765 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.146618055344 0.236089414692 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0429892634071 0.076458572812 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.035635519473 0.0737576698707 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0781759168122 0.150856017488 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0327322308165 0.0645574589148 51% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.07 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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