Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The government should require all young adults to perform some kind of national service, such as military service or social work.Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.
Services has tremendous leverage on our quotidian routine life. It influence in a direct and intangible way. It has indelible impact on person's ideology, preference, and life pattern. Although some people hold the viewpoint that it should not be mandatory for youth to perform these services during their life. However, others may hold a different intellect and disagree with this notion. My personal and actual observation of life which had led me to agree with the idea that this kind of social works have many beneficial and effective on the person's future. In the following essay, I shall delve into most outstanding reasons.
To commence with, this will definitely equip us with knowledge and skills to effectively respond to the demands, challenges, and opportunities for global competitiveness. my own experience is a good example of this, before I got involved in social volunteering services to red cross, I have no information how to answers phone calls, take notes, and communicate with people. Furthermore, my supervisor teach me how to use computers to enter data and make some statistic measurements. Later, I get the chance to be accepted in two jobs in comparison to other individuals who have not get the chances to be accepted and qualified.
In addition, it will ameliorate our relations and let us became more socialize. without involving in such social errands, will effect our social life and became lonely at the end. For instance, ore of my friends never had the opportunity to participate in some events and social jobs. She was merely know any friends and know how to makes some. Getting jobs once a week in church to help people in needs, helps her a lot to change completely to more friendly, enjoyably person. Moreover, this enhance her own life with her family too.
To sum up, after contemplating the reasons that I mentioned before, I would like to reinforce my idea that social services have numerous impact on person life because it provide us with knowledge and job opportunities and assist us to make more friends and social relations/
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...merous impact on person life because it provide us with knowledge and job opportunities...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, so, for instance, in addition, kind of, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 15.1003584229 33% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1735.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 346.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01445086705 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31289638616 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85631760061 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.586705202312 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 559.8 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.6401455205 48.9658058833 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.3888888889 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2222222222 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167659821784 0.236089414692 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0470155589222 0.076458572812 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0371354955747 0.0737576698707 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104930991922 0.150856017488 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0254184456905 0.0645574589148 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.87 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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