Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The government should require all young adults to perform some kind of national service, such as military service or social work.Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

National services have a tremendous impact on our progress and well-being. In fact, they can enhance our success in immeasurable ways because they encompass our core values. Therefore. I totally agree that the government should require all young adults to perform some kind of national service, such as military service or social work.
To begin with, national services can make young adults more strong, independent, confident. In addition, they can solve any obstacle that may face, due to the fact that they already earned a lot of training in their period of the institute and they have an opportunity to build up all the bonds to be more confident. For example, if a person recruited in an army, he would be more confident and had more responsibility than a person that didn't get a chance to serve there. Although a lot of people might disagree with this opinion they would notice a big difference between an adult went already to the military and an adult had not. Consequently, national services have a crucial effect on people life because they enhance their confidence and independence.
A second exquisite point to be mentioned here is that national services would make people more socialize and ameliorate their relationship with other people. Admittedly, these kinds of services would enhance communication with people who had the same situation. In another word, when people are on the same duty, at the same time, they can feel each other and share the same empathy. So, national services have an important effect on society because they would increase the relationship bonds between people.
Due to the aforementioned reasons, I adamantly agree that The government should require all young adults to perform some kind of national service, such as military service or social work.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, if, may, second, so, therefore, well, for example, in addition, in fact, kind of, such as, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1503.0 1977.66487455 76% => OK
No of words: 295.0 407.700716846 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09491525424 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74717686956 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 212.727598566 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.505084745763 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 485.1 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.2022990894 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.615384615 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6923076923 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.07692307692 5.45110844103 167% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.278144619769 0.236089414692 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.133310618092 0.076458572812 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.187539919096 0.0737576698707 254% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.256530213408 0.150856017488 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.178055007882 0.0645574589148 276% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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