Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

There are more and more celebrities showing up on TV or Network and express their opinions which influence others. Some people believe those opinions are more important to younger people than they are to older poeple. I agreed with that.

Firstly, due to older peoples less exposure to those celebrities, tthose opinions influence more on the younger people than the older people. Older people are busy with their work and they seldom have time to pay attention to those celebrities and what they said. They do not even know who they are, which means they would not be influenced by their words. Nobody will believe a strangers' word. In contrast, younger people do not need to work hard to support the family, they have a lot of leisure time to surf the Internet and watch those celebrities' stories and what they said. They admired them. This increases the possibility that they will be influenced by those celebrities. Take my sister and aunt as an example, when they watched TV together, a new but really porpuler ssinger sang on the stage, which is my sisters' favorite singer. She liked him because he spent a lot of efforts to became a singer and he sang very well. She spent a great amount of time on watching his video. That singer encouraged everyone to work hard and my sister truly believed. While my sister was dancing with the song, my aunt asked me who that singer is, because she never saw this singer before. Less exposure to these celebrities can weaken the influence of those celebrities on the older people.

Secondly, older people form their own views towards this world, they are not that easy to be influenced.They went through many troubles and saw a lot in t the past. However, our younger people are still exploring this world and do not know much, which made us easier to be influenced. When I saw celebrities giving their opinions, I always think it is right, because they are impressive and encouraging, like some life mottos. But my dad will always remind me, life is not that easy when I behave admire to those celebrities.

Furthermore, the oldder people are not interested

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, really, second, secondly, so, still, well, while, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1745.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 367.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75476839237 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47144522257 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.50136239782 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 540.0 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.1743912364 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.0952380952 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4761904762 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.14285714286 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.235676360008 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0792709279195 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0805277872162 0.0737576698707 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155308085167 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0862924132927 0.0645574589148 134% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.97 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.02 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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