Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, there are a lot of sources for people to obtain knowledge and build one's own perspective. Some believe only in scientific reports and the doctors, while some believe in significant figures in the society. There is a saying about how the opinion of celebrities, like well-known entertainers and athletes, will have greater impact on younger people than on older people. From my standpoint, I also agree this statement. The reasons are as follows.
Firstly, the fact that most young people now often go on internet is a great contributor to this phenomenon. As those advertisements of famous people are always on our cellphone, it's hard for them not to leave the impression in our mind. Take myself for example. I once was really into running. At that time, I happened to see the video about a famous runner who just won the first place in the international race, in which he kept promoting the shoes he wore. Since that advertisement constantly popped out on the screen, at the end I couldn't help it but bought it. In contrast, since my mother doesn't surf the internet as much, she always listen to the advise from the shop owner to get a pair of shoes.
Another reason for this is because celebrities can sometimes be the significant others in teenagers' minds. As the entertaining industry blooms, all those entertainer now can be considered as a new form of success. To teenagers, they will tend to find a role models among them and see his or her words as treasure. From my personal experience, I used to mark down every meaningful lyrics in the songs of the band, Mayday. Each of them really encouraged me a lot. I still see them as a major influencer of my life as those words always give my the impetus to move forward. While for my parents, they see this as childish. They would rather prefer if I memorize more from some classic literature.
Maybe the reason for entertainers and athletes being a rather insignificant source for old people is that old people are still too conservative. They see the new form of influencer inferior. In their standpoint, it would be better to seek opinion from people in each profession.
In all, the phenomenon, that young people more appeal to the opinions of celebrities, may be resulted from the prevalence of internet among younger generation and the increasing impact of those people to teenagers. Also, it may be that the elder generation is too conservative. Thus, I agree with the statement.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: couldn't
... popped out on the screen, at the end I couldnt help it but bought it. In contrast, sin...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
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...bought it. In contrast, since my mother doesnt surf the internet as much, she always l...
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Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'listens'.
Suggestion: listens
...t surf the internet as much, she always listen to the advise from the shop owner to ge...
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Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... internet as much, she always listen to the advise from the shop owner to get a pair of sh...
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Line 3, column 656, Rule ID: GIVE_ADVISE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'advice' (a noun)?
Suggestion: advice
...ernet as much, she always listen to the advise from the shop owner to get a pair of sh...
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Line 5, column 149, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this entertainer' or 'those entertainers'?
Suggestion: this entertainer; those entertainers
...s the entertaining industry blooms, all those entertainer now can be considered as a new form of ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, really, so, still, thus, well, while, for example, in contrast
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2038.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 425.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79529411765 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54043259262 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82177985011 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.536470588235 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 634.5 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.7616896067 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.3846153846 100.406767564 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.3461538462 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.76923076923 5.45110844103 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214663129417 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0540090361783 0.076458572812 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.055388798371 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130148844817 0.150856017488 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0524846529015 0.0645574589148 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 11.7677419355 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.26 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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