Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Although some people might believe young people and juvenile of the present time have no influence in our future society, I completely disagree with them. In my opinion, young people today, are the most important part of future society, and if we ignore them, we will be in a real trouble tomorrow. In the following article, I try to give my reasons and explain why I think young people are our future power.
To begin with, it sounds clear that the society is in the hand of energetic and active people of the age who are about 25-50. Thus, young people of age below 20 of today, will be the next active generation about 20 years later. Consequently, it seems unfair to overlook them with this perspective in mind that they won't have impact on important decisions. We should pay attention to them, and train them well enough, not to be in trouble a few years after that. To speak more precisely, whether we want or not, the present people influencing the society now, will be too old in a near future that they have to be retired. And instead, we will face the people who were young before, but now contribute highly to the society.
Moreover, as young people have an open mind, they can teach a lot to those experienced people who are excellent in their job, but sometimes need a new way. Sometimes it happens that a creative young person suggests an issue which seems a novel solution. Thus, I think we'd better not underestimate them. If in each era we use this young and dynamic energy, we will have a more brilliant future. For example, I had a great professor in university that always reminded us of many of his students who had taught him a lot. Although he was a great professor, but he believed in the creative, open minded brains of young students.
To wrap it up, our future of society is in the hand of young people of today, as people grow older and present influencive people will retire in the future. In addition, our young people not only will build the future of societies but also have a great impact now, let alone the future which is certainly theirs! That's why I believe that paying attention to young people is equal to a brighter future.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, if, look, moreover, so, thus, well, for example, i think, in addition, in my opinion, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1775.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 393.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.5165394402 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41298663818 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.496183206107 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 560.7 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.9267215862 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.411764706 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1176470588 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.29411764706 5.45110844103 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.255895387245 0.236089414692 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0887759453695 0.076458572812 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0667705199217 0.0737576698707 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17841422301 0.150856017488 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0667915521186 0.0645574589148 103% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 58.1214874552 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.23 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.39 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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