Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It goes without saying that in contemporary sophisticated society we live in, future of every society has assumed an increasingly essential role in the nation's life. It comes as no surprise that young people can be influential on building desirable society. There is a substantial number of people who are of the opinion that young people contribute to making important decisions which determine future of society. While there are those who are of the opinion that nowadays significant decisions of every community are not affected by young people association. I personally concur with the latter group's idea. There are several reasons for this. The most important ones of which will be elaborated upon below.
One imperative reason coming to mind at first to substantiate my standpoint is that in present-day, the government does not provide opportunity for young people to involve them in developing the society. The majority of the young people are unemployed and their ingenuity is being wasted. Unfortunately, the government prefers to maintain their experienced old employees instead of resigning them to substitute them with the youth who have effective and innovative performance. For example, I remembered once my brother sought for a job. He went to every company which was relative to his expertise. Although he has studied in top university and has become accomplished person, unfortunately, he could not find his proper job.
The second interesting point which deserves some words here is that today's young people are too hopeless and despondent about their future society to do effective action. Since the economic condition of the country is getting worse day by day, this causes them to lose their hope virtually. A recent nationwide survey conducted on mental health of young people revealed that over the half of the youth have severe psychological problem. They are so pessimistic about their future that they do not have any passion to perform an effective action.
To make a long story short, taking all of the aforementioned ideas into consideration, one can safely assume that nowadays the youth are not influential on building societies, since not only does the government not provide for them appropriate occupation but also they have serious psychological problem that they cannot do any effective action.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 153, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'nations'' or 'nation's'?
Suggestion: nations'; nation's
...d an increasingly essential role in the nations life. It comes as no surprise that youn...
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Line 1, column 416, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ions which determine future of society. While there are those who are of the opinion ...
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Line 7, column 36, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
.... To make a long story short, taking all of the aforementioned ideas into consideration...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, while, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1969.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 372.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29301075269 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93189128895 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55376344086 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 641.7 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.9259950604 48.9658058833 147% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.388888889 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6666666667 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.88888888889 5.45110844103 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.19950387815 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0625004850576 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0526560866867 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11480654252 0.150856017488 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.071224588252 0.0645574589148 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 10.9000537634 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.