Do you agree or disagree that job has greater effect on your overall happiness than social life?
Both of the high prestige job and social life play a pivotal role in the quality of people. A controversial question which is often raised regarding this issue is whether job has greater effect on our overall happiness than social life. Some people possess the conviction that this statement is true whereas others hold exactly the opposite and allege that the importance of social life overweight the importance of job. I personally contend that although social life has an undeniable effect on our lives, having a greater job is of paramount importance. To substantiate my point of view, the following paragraphs represent a cursory glance at the most outstanding reasons.
The first reason coming to mind to elucidate my standpoint is concerned with this issue that from the psychological point of view, having a good job has myriad of desirable influences in our lives. Job can has an effect on the self-esteem and self-confidence of people in their social lives. Someone who has a high position in a well-known company, has more confidence and respect and always others admire him. To shed light on this issue, take a real example from my friends. I have a friend who works as a manager in a big company. On the other hand, his brother is merely a simple employee. All people respect my friend and admire him. These demeanor leads to the fact that my friend is satisfied with his life and is happy. On the contrary, his brother suffers from the behavior of others and is discontent with his position. These repercussions contribute to his unhappiness.
The second rationale behind this opinion is rooted in the fact that in today's world, economy is of paramount importance in our lives. Thanks to the fact that lots of countries suffer from economic problems and the rate of unemployment incessantly escalates. Thus, getting involved in a job with a good salary and position is crucial. In fact, someone who has a good job feels secure. As a consequence, owing to this feeling, he is happy and can have an enjoyable life. The noteworthy statistics, revealed by a social research conducted in my country, show that more than 70 percent of people who are satisfied with their lives has a good job. Conversely, about 85 percent of people who are anxious and depressed do not have an appropriate job.
In conclusion, contemplating all the aforementioned reasons, one soon realizes that not only job is one of the most important factors in our lives, but also it can affect all aspects of our lives. Therefore, if people want to have a convenient and happy life, they should strive to have a good job.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'mind elucidating'.
Suggestion: mind elucidating
... reasons. The first reason coming to mind to elucidate my standpoint is concerned with this is...
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Line 3, column 207, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[2]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'have'
Suggestion: have
...irable influences in our lives. Job can has an effect on the self-esteem and self-c...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...cussions contribute to his unhappiness. The second rationale behind this opinion...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, conversely, first, if, regarding, second, so, therefore, thus, well, whereas, in conclusion, in fact, on the contrary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2166.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 447.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84563758389 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59808378696 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81080862317 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.48322147651 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 676.8 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.2589578303 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.25 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.625 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.125 5.45110844103 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227095783923 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0648901557847 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0850417594875 0.0737576698707 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152098044171 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.107217291796 0.0645574589148 166% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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