Do you agree professional athletes such as the football player and basketball player deserve high salaries to be paid?
For society, there are no definite answers regarding whether athletes deserve high salaries or not. Some people may think that professional athletes do not deserve high salaries, while others can argue that they deserve high salaries. In my opinion, I agree with the latter.
To begin with, professional athletes have to be under extremely high pressure environment. To be more concise, whether they can persist in extremely high pressure environment is the necessary condition to be professional athletes. Only when they can bear such high pressure environment can they prove that they are qualified to be professional athletes. For instance, NBA players must be under tremendous stressful environment because they are renown people. In addition, if they lose the game in the competition, they will receive a lot of criticisms from public, fans, and group members. Since professional athletes possess perseverance to endure such psychological pressure, they surely deserve handsome salaries. Therefore, it is obviously that professional athletes can bear such environment (tolerate such touch environment)in which other people can't.
Secondly, professional athletes must run the risk of death. To be specific, professional athletes have their body involving in the extreme condition regularly. So dangerous is this condition that it results in many athletes' death. For instance, a great number of renown athletes die in sport fields, because their bodies are in extreme status regularly, which will lead to sudden of death easily. In addition, when professional athletes die, there is no wholly complete policy that ensures their family stable money. Since professional athletes have high risk of death, they should be paid handsome salaries. Only when they can be paid enormous salaries are they willing to run the risk of death to involve in their profession.
Last but not least, professional athletes have positive effect on children. Children have benefited from professional athletes considerably since they can learn many from professional athletes. For example, children who view those athletes as hero indirectly learn how to persist in difficulty and what is perseverance through observing them. Furthermore, most of children eventually cultivate healthy attitudes, and are more courageous to chase their dream. Usually it is because of seeing professional athletes as hero that young people dream of one day being a pilot or winning a gold medal in the Olympics. Since professional athletes help the world develop children's mental abilities, they deserve handsome salaries. Therefore, through professional athletes, Children's mindset has positive growth.
Admittedly, some people may oppose me regarding this statement. For example, people from different types of jobs, diligent in their work, should also receive high salaries. However, professional athletes do not just work hard like everyone else but have to risk their life in their profession. Hence, I still believe that professional athletes rightly merit high salaries.
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2591.0 1977.66487455 131% => OK
No of words: 460.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.63260869565 4.8611393121 116% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6311565067 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91122185094 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.486956521739 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 804.6 618.680645161 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.9652860381 48.9658058833 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.5357142857 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4285714286 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.25 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 14.0 3.85842293907 363% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.316212794825 0.236089414692 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0974382739956 0.076458572812 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.058564337106 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188992999408 0.150856017488 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.052435726501 0.0645574589148 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 58.1214874552 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.08 10.9000537634 138% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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