Essay topics: TPO-34 - Independent Writing Task (I devoted more time to comparison of the past with today)
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
A vast part of contemporary parents complain about difficulties which are connected with educating and bringing up offspring in today's conditions. They tend to believe that cell-phones, online games and social networks have made their life more difficult. Although I might understand their point of view, I cannot agree with it. The reasons on which my prospect is based will be discussed in details below.
Firstly, parents have to control activities of their progeny. Children by default would prefer to spend their time on having fun and playing with their friends because it is natural for them. However, a job of a decent parent is to limit and control occupation of his children and this responsibility has not changed for ages. In fact, fifty years ago a mother ought to limit time which her progeny spend on playing with friends on the backyard or watching TV. Today playing moves from a backyard to online games and watching TV turns into hanging on social media and a modern responsible parent must help his child to spend time on education via limiting access to the internet.
Secondly, today's children badly depend on the internet and social networks and parent may benefit from it by being engaged in child's school life. In the past, parents had only vague understanding of their children school performance. However, today many schools and even classes have their pages on Facebook or another social media platform. Thus parents who have their Facebook pages may see how their children’s studying is going on and how their relationships with other pupils are. Additionally to it, parents may read children’s twits, Facebook pages and thus they are aware of children’s life and studying. In other words, the fact that students spend a significant amount of time online is beneficial for parents and for children because parents keep in touch with progeny's performance at school and if there is any trouble they may react quickly.
Admittedly, there are some reasons which may allow to someone to state that in the spreading of the network, smartphones, e-tables has given children unlimited access to entertainment. Chiefly, the one may aver that children will spend all available time on the internet activities and games and even when they at home there is no guarantee that youngsters are studying school subjects and that in the past, a parent may easily limit this factor by taking away TV set and living a child with textbooks alone. However, I still buttress the idea that advent of modern technology is beneficial because a parent may efficiently exercise control over children by using inbuilt tools of parental control of Microsoft or iOS. In fact, modern parent may monitor children's participation to studying much more effectively than our parents could.
To wrap up, although parenting and education of children in a modern world may be challenging, responsible parents who use the available resources wisely will steer their offspring behavior much more efficiently than they predecessor could.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: In the past, parents had only vague understanding of their children school performance.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to children and school
flaws:
the reason one and reason three are somehow duplicated.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 24 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 495 350
No. of Characters: 2489 1500
No. of Different Words: 241 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.717 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.028 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.644 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 179 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 142 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 92 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 52 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.75 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.427 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.65 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.317 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.535 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.113 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 492, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Additionally,
...ir relationships with other pupils are. Additionally to it, parents may read children's...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, thus, in fact, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 9.8082437276 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 52.1666666667 136% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2557.0 1977.66487455 129% => OK
No of words: 495.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16565656566 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71684168287 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76840954688 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492929292929 0.524837075471 94% => OK
syllable_count: 764.1 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.1383911376 48.9658058833 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.85 100.406767564 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.75 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.85 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182333232181 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0641814115248 0.076458572812 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0352400232929 0.0737576698707 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115980396512 0.150856017488 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0170623248324 0.0645574589148 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 11.7677419355 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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