In the future, students may have the choice of studying at home by using technology such as computers or television or of studying at traditional schools. Which would you prefer? Use reasons and specific details to explain your choice.
Some people prefer to study at traditional schools because of communication with students and teachers which improves social skills. However, I prefer to study at home by using a number of technologies such as computers, television because of benefits for the government. Moreover, technology makes studying easier and comfortable by saving money and time.
First of all, the 21st century has brought a lot of technological innovations into our lives and in future it is more likely to grow even further. Therefore, we have to keep up with this growth and apply them in every realm of life. By using technology in education the government will benefit financially greatly. According to the statistics, USA spend more than 40% of its budget every year which can be directed to another crucial industries such as health care by using technology. For example, if the government uses these innovations, the high school students will be studying at their homes, so the country will be able to cut off school buses or reduce the amount of schools that don’t perform well around the country and so on. In brief, governments would save a lot of money by using technology in education.
Secondly, technology would make student’s life easier and they would be able to save money. When college students study their courses at homes they could save a lot of money on commuting to colleges. Also, the online programs and courses cost cheaper than regular or traditional classes, so students could save up money on tuitions and do not take students loans which are very hard to pay back. Moreover, in most cases college students have to live apart from their parents which is another huge expense for parents to pay for their kid’s living on campus or apartment. Therefore, if the technology provides such convenience why not should we take advantage of it?
Last but not least, in future technology would also save students’ time which is a real opportunity to organize their time more freely. In traditional way of studying students spend half the day at schools, not to mention commuting time which is at least an hour. It makes the students exhausted and that is why most of them fail their exams and midterms. In future with technology the students would have opportunity to schedule their time as they want. They can take all the classes in the morning and spend the rest of the day doing their hobbies, working, or even attending gym classes. That is going to be a super comfort for all students.
When all is said and done, if the technology provides such a chance to live with comfort and easiness, then we have to take advantage of it because we can save time and money, and, the government would profit of it.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, apart from, at least, for example, in brief, such as, first of all, in most cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2269.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 466.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86909871245 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64618479453 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6866241472 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.484978540773 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 703.8 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.7109103032 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.047619048 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1904761905 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.95238095238 5.45110844103 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.293314129807 0.236089414692 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0986306684943 0.076458572812 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0807374220382 0.0737576698707 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.185634557696 0.150856017488 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.094400097274 0.0645574589148 146% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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