Governments should focus their budgets more on environmental protection than on economic development

Essay topics:

Governments should focus their budgets more on environmental protection than on economic development.

In this preceding decades, government's budget and plans have played pivotal role in human being's lives. Some people believe that government should dedicate the budget to environmental protection more than economic development. while some others might have an opposite view. I personally contend that the money allocation should be focus on economic development. In what follows, I will elaborate on my viewpoint.
The most significant reason is that, government should spend budget in economic development in order to pave a way for creating more jobs for individuals especially young persons. Without any doubt, young individuals are the assets of the society, with diverse job opportunities younger people will be more willing for life. And with young and fresh minds in society, the society is going to be more developing and progressive. Thus, the government can get help from young persons and their open mind in order to face other issues like environmental problems.
Another equally important point is that, in this era many societies and individuals are suffer from poverty and hunger, so solving this problem is government's duty and should be the government's preiority by allocating the budget to economic predicaments. providing Individual's welfare is the most important responsible of governments. Thus, economic development should be the top of the list for governments than environmental protection. Since, without satisfied and peacefull people it is implausible to protect the environment. And, governments can protect the environment better by a developed economic.
To wrap it up, I hold this idea that governments should allocate their budget into economic development than protecting the environment in order to create more jobs and eliminate the poverty.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 228, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: While
...tection more than economic development. while some others might have an opposite view...
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Line 1, column 228, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “while” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...tection more than economic development. while some others might have an opposite view...
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Line 1, column 332, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'focused', 'focussed'?
Suggestion: focused; focussed
...end that the money allocation should be focus on economic development. In what follow...
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'suffered'.
Suggestion: suffered
... era many societies and individuals are suffer from poverty and hunger, so solving thi...
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Suggestion: Providing
...ng the budget to economic predicaments. providing Individuals welfare is the most importa...
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Line 4, column 192, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...te more jobs and eliminate the poverty.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, thus, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 43.0788530466 39% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1509.0 1977.66487455 76% => OK
No of words: 272.0 407.700716846 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.54779411765 4.8611393121 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06108636974 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06420756011 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 212.727598566 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.547794117647 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 472.5 618.680645161 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.0902948781 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.6 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1333333333 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.26666666667 5.45110844103 23% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.513282672493 0.236089414692 217% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.16810705935 0.076458572812 220% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.15024262362 0.0737576698707 204% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.33794239463 0.150856017488 224% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0717110106957 0.0645574589148 111% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 58.1214874552 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.61 10.9000537634 134% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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