Governments should spend more money in sponsoring arts than in athletics like state Olympics team

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Governments should spend more money in sponsoring arts than in athletics (like state Olympics team).

In the ever-changing world that we are living, many things definitely will be altered in a completely different way by 20 years later. In the last decades, people have experienced an enormous change in the type of educational facilities. People are more dependent on some kinds of information resources like e-books, and online books. Regarding this circumstance, a controversial question arises here as to whether in 20 years from now on, students will rule out printed books from their lives or not. I, personally believe that printed books will be used as much as previously.
First and foremost, if students want to stop reading printed books, they inevitably use the online or electronic version of them that is not convenient enough. With the advent of technology, people use numerous advantages of new facilities in daily life, however, these technological approaches sometimes are not depleted of disadvantages. Scientific studies revealed that looking at digital devices like a tablet, smartphones, and computers hurt eyes drastically because these devices have a kind of harmful radiation that makes eye diseases in a long time. Therefore, students cannot shift from printed books to electronic books easily. A personal example can drive this notion home. Once, at university, I had to read plenty of papers on the internet in order to accomplish a project. It was demanding for me because after several hours of spending time in front of the computer, I had an irritating feeling in my eyes. Hence, I think it is not possible to abandon printed books and turn to digital ones.
Second, printed books have significant merit for students as they can write a note in the margin of the book and highlight the important notion in each page. Many students prefer to make a summary of the material on each page and it helps them to consolidate knowledge in a better way so that for the exam they only need to read the notes and make a great score. Other resources do not provide such a medium for students because they are not as touchable as printed books and as a result, students lose this advantage. For example, when I wanted to take an exam at university, I had received a part of the material the day before the exam. I inevitably read those materials in my tablet. I remember because I could not write anything on the page, I could not concentrate on the notions very well. In this way my productivity in studying decreased dramatically.
In conclusion, taking two mentioned reasons into account, I believe that printed books are the best reading resources to study and students cannot exclude them from their study programs. These books not only are convenient and harmless for students' health, but they also offer more options like taking notes during studying and give the students more chance to have a more focused reading.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 402, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...e, a controversial question arises here as to whether in 20 years from now on, students will ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, look, regarding, second, so, therefore, well, as to, for example, i think, in conclusion, kind of, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2365.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 479.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93736951983 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67825486995 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79176180082 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 254.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.530271398747 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 761.4 618.680645161 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.8151731098 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.5 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7727272727 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.72727272727 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0401766070565 0.236089414692 17% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0115104815964 0.076458572812 15% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0284445585584 0.0737576698707 39% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0315835174133 0.150856017488 21% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0261216267817 0.0645574589148 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 86.8835125448 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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