In today’s world, people are increasingly watching TV. With the advance of technology, great TVs are cheaper than in the past. Almost every people have at least one TV in their houses, or even in their work. Many people spent several hours every day watching movies or television. I think this is a big problem for people who do this because two reasons, and I will explore in the following essay.
Firstly, nowadays, there are many channels and a variety of films that are being produced daily to attract people to watch their productions. Hence, people spent numerous hours watching TV, and they usually do not have time to do others activities or stay with friends and family. The effects could vary some are good while others are awful. One the one hand, my brother has been watching series on TV for many hours daily in the last months. On the other hand, my sister has been learned a lot about science and history in cultural programs on TV.
Secondly, some kind of movies or programs could change the people’s behaviors. This occurs because of these movies and television influence the people. For example, it’s undeniable the increasing news about rapes, murders, assaults every day. When people watching these news on TV many people get scared or even get angry. In contrast, when someone watching a fun movie, he gets happy easily.
Finally concluding, movies and television are present in almost all houses of the whole world. They are an important entertainment center and culture about everything. However, it all relies on how people use this device. There is no doubt that movies and television change the people’s behavior, but people have to know themselves to smooth these issues. They need to better control their time too. Therefore, they could spend more hours in other activities and stay among friends and family.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 275, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this news' or 'these newses'?
Suggestion: this news; these newses
...ssaults every day. When people watching these news on TV many people get scared or even ge...
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Line 5, column 360, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'someone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'watches'.
Suggestion: watches
...en get angry. In contrast, when someone watching a fun movie, he gets happy easily. F...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Finally,
...g a fun movie, he gets happy easily. Finally concluding, movies and television are p...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, hence, however, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, at least, for example, i think, in contrast, kind of, no doubt, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1556.0 1977.66487455 79% => OK
No of words: 312.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98717948718 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20279927342 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50829491737 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.551282051282 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 468.9 618.680645161 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.2451705762 48.9658058833 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 74.0952380952 100.406767564 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.8571428571 20.6045352989 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.95238095238 5.45110844103 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20422306778 0.236089414692 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0629253162671 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0667196648016 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132207819052 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0489535175453 0.0645574589148 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.07 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.57 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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