If people want to contribute to the society, which of the following is the best way?
A. riding bicycle or walking on foot
B. recycling the waste
C. buy local organic food.
Can you imagine there were flocks of birds flying high up in the sky, or perched on tree branches, chirping and hopping around? Suddenly, one day, they all disappeared, nowhere to be seen. This is exactly what is depicted in Rachel Carson’s“Silent Spring,” where she vividly points out the drawbacks of extensive use of DDT and passionately advocates the importance of environmental protection. In my opinion, a destroyed environment is just like a noxious tumor, afflicting pain and devastation continuously. Therefore, I think protecting the environment should be considered the priority and to accomplish that and to contribute most to the society, the only viable is to buy local organic food.
To begin with, buying local organic food can significantly reduce the amount of pesticides or insecticides being sprayed onto crops. With a reduced amount of insecticides, less toxic pollutants would be left in the soil, where the earth would have a chance to stay fertile, which can in turn help contribute to sustainable growth in the environment. For example, in Netherland, farmers have been banned from using insecticides to tend their produce. In fact, all of their agricultural yields are organic. Though the financial cost and the cost of human labor are significantly higher than those of traditionally grown crops, farmers in Netherland need not switch to new fields or plow deeper into the soil or leave certain lands fallow while looking for some other space to grow crops. Instead, they can continue planting crops in the original field since the nutrients in the soil are not destroyed or annihilated by the insecticides or some other artificial chemicals. The condition of the soil therefore stays conducive to agricultural purposes. In other words, farmers in Netherland let the nature take its course and the end result is that the nature can indeed take care of itself. With the original lands still in a healthy and robust condition, farmers in Netherland need not resort to or turn to or exploit more lands for growing crops.
Furthermore, if people purchase local organic food, this can contribute to society most in that people will begin to recognize the importance of healthful living. Nowadays, with people getting busier and busier, people have grown less wary of what they put inside their mouth. People consume fast food or artificial products such as sausage or soft drinks in exchange of convenience and alacrity. The repercussion of this is that people nowadays face a host of illnesses such as diabetes or obesity that people in the past did not have to worry. Without healthy bodies or wholesome functioning of human bodies, how can a society exist, survive, or even thrive? Imagine a society where people get sick all the time due to the heavily-polluted or unhealthy food they have been wolfing down. People couldn’t go to work because they need to go to doctors all the time. The economy of that society is therefore likely to decline because humans are just like cogs, the lack of which could cause the entire society to crumble. The food that humans eat is equivalent to tiny cogs to make our bodies function. If human beings end up eating inorganic food and getting sick all the time, the ripple effect would just be what is described above, where the complete functioning of the society would be compromised. Only by grown local organic food can therefore permit people to become more aware of their health and this biological reaction that serves as the underlying of the world ecology.
Irrefutably, some dissidents might disavow my arguments by claiming that recycling the waste or riding the bicycle or walking on foot could better contribute to society. Some might think that recycling the waste can help sustain the environment since the waste could be converted into something useful, less waste created and more useful products created. Others might think that walking on foot or riding the bicycle can contribute most to the society, since less noisome gas emissions would be emitted, thereby containing the increase of some greenhouse gases. Granted, these are the measures that people can contribute to the society however, have those people forgotten that growing local organic food can contribute to the greatest benefits to our society since local organic food can both help mitigate environmental degradation, resulting in environmental sustainability, foster economy growth, and make human beings much healthier? A host of benefits conferred by growing local organic food are not confined to the foot itself. The food can make a contribution to our society, personally, physically, socially, economically, and ecologically. After all, we would not want our world descend into what Rachel Carson depicts in her work, where greenery becomes a luxury or even illusion.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, look, so, still, therefore, while, after all, for example, i think, in fact, such as, in my opinion, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 31.0 9.8082437276 316% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 33.0 13.8261648746 239% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 109.0 52.1666666667 209% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 4065.0 1977.66487455 206% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 785.0 407.700716846 193% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17834394904 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.29318915704 4.48103885553 118% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89412509742 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 370.0 212.727598566 174% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.471337579618 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1278.9 618.680645161 207% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 10.0 3.08781362007 324% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 32.0 20.6003584229 155% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.78895275 48.9658058833 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.03125 100.406767564 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.53125 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.03125 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.228610621844 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0585117267481 0.076458572812 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0670664250625 0.0737576698707 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13374030275 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0783121961468 0.0645574589148 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 11.7677419355 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 193.0 86.8835125448 222% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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