If you want to recommend a way to reduce living expenses for your friend, which of the following will you choose? Why?
1. Find a roommate to share a room
2. Do not buy the latest mobile phone, Buy new technological devices less frequently
3. Buy cheap foods and cook home (do not often eat outside)
In our sophisticated world, being a student can be too difficult. In addition to making an effort to study hard, they should make money for their costs. Therefore, I highly recommend them sharing their rooms with roommates to spend less. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into two conspicuous reasons to elaborate on my standpoint.
To begin with, the more roommate you have, the less you have to pay. It is crystal clear that when one finds a roommate to share his room with, the living expenses would be extremely reduced because he has to pay half of the rent cost. Renting a room costs a large amount of money and it is a major component of living costs for students. Moreover, some further expenses such as bills are halved too. My own experience is a compelling example demonstrating this fact. Two years ago, I was an undergraduate student specialized in mathematics, and I had a difficult time to meet the cost of living because I had to pay my tuition fee, rent a room in the dormitory, and pay back my student loans. One of my friends advised me to look for a roommate. I took his point and shared my room with a distant friend. Later on, I could afford the expenses easier and my financial problem started to alleviate. Had I not shared my room, I would stay in trouble.
Another equally significant point is that when you share your room with someone else, you can develop your relationship with him. Consequently, you can improve your communication skills and the more sociable someone is, the more job opportunities he would gain. Thus, you can find a job to help you with your living expenses. Also, your roommate sometimes can assist you to get employed. For instance, I had a friend that found an almost well-paying job in the student center on campus, since her roommate was working there for a long time and was aware of job vacancies. Currently, my friend has not only a nice friend but also a good job.
To make a long story short, I firmly believe that one helpful way to lower the costs of living for students is by sharing rooms. That's because a roommate is responsible for paying a part of many expenses such as the rent. Besides, the student can form a friendship with him that can be beneficial in innumerable ways such as finding a career.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: That's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, consequently, if, look, moreover, so, therefore, thus, well, as to, for instance, in addition, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1885.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 409.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.60880195599 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67694117831 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533007334963 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 576.0 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.6032287522 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.9565217391 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7826086957 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.95652173913 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199532037104 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0648125096259 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0470009677451 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123259745008 0.150856017488 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0357852202129 0.0645574589148 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 11.7677419355 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.16 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.45 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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