Independency from parents or staying with Tham longer

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Independency from parents or staying with Tham longer

I grew up in the family where I always get everything what I wish if my parents find my ideas are good. One of my decision was moving out from my home to another country so early when I were sixteen years old. I will explore some compelling reasons why I believe that the independence from parents and founding an own way of live as soon as it possible is such a great alternative to the life in the parents home for a longer time in the following essay.
To begin with, our parents love us from the bottom of their heart and never tell us to go out. Theyl embrace who we are constantly, even if a child has an addiction or he or she doesn't get success in profession or in a life in general. That is why staying at home for a long time might be dangerous. I think, my parent's house is permanent comfort zone and my shelter from nasty events in my life. For instance, once I had graduated from my university, I got home and thought to stay there for awhile before I found the next university or the job. However, I stacked there for eight months instead of two. Now I fell that I miss some opportunities because nothing bothered me and I fell safe all the time. I don't have a job and I am late for university application period. All of the above shows that staying at home for a long time played a bad joke to me.
The second argument in the favor of the first belief is that when a person is getting older he or she should think about own family. When an individual builds up own flat and the life in general, it helps a lot later. Because a person learns how to sweep a floor, how to cook and what exactly he or she need for the independent life. For example, it is not such easy to start living with boyfriend. I had a man, how came to my life from his parents house. He had a lot of surprises how actually independent life is questionable and that for electricity we should pay to. I did not enjoy his attitude to home routine and broke up with him later.
To sum it up, an independency from parents lead to happy own family, elaborately done home routine and successful way of life.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: doesn't
...f a child has an addiction or he or she doesnt get success in profession or in a life ...
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Message: Did you mean 'a while'?
Suggestion: a while
... got home and thought to stay there for awhile before I found the next university or t...
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Suggestion: don't
...ered me and I fell safe all the time. I dont have a job and I am late for university...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, first, however, if, second, so, while, for example, for instance, i think, in general, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1687.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 405.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.16543209877 4.8611393121 86% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45170887154 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.528395061728 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 557.1 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.1824608102 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.35 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.25 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.45110844103 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.231960729522 0.236089414692 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0659715312944 0.076458572812 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.062016844124 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151510111338 0.150856017488 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0253010207347 0.0645574589148 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.3 11.7677419355 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 6.91 10.9000537634 63% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.66 8.01818996416 83% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 86.8835125448 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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