Is it more important to be able to work with a group of people in a team or to work independently? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer.
Historically, people have been living in the society. Even ancient people made groups to support each other in order to survive. They were hunting together, they shared meals and leisure. In my opinion, it is more important to be capable of working with a group of people than to work independently. There are a few reasons why I feel this way.
To start with, a person who is able to work in a team has more chances to succeed in life. Indeed, in the modern world, any business based mostly on the teamwork. If a person can communicate effectively with co-workers, he/she is likely to make a contribution to the success of the entire team and, hence, can be noticed by his/her hirers. For instance, Back in my country, I started my professional way in the pharmaceutical field as a regular pharmacist. I personally always have had great communicative skills. I never hesitated to ask questions from seasoned colleagues and share my knowledge with the less experienced co-workers ( pharmacy technicians). Because of that, it did not take too long for me to become a valuable member of the team. As a result, I was noticed by my employers and after two years of the hiring, I was promoted to the pharmacy manager position. To that end, my ability to interact with the pharmacy staff helped me to move through the ranks of the company very quickly.
Secondly, working in a group gives an opportunity to make new friends. Life can be very tough on people. To survive, people have to overcome a myriad of difficulties and obstacles. Some people have to work very hard to support their families, others even have to move to another country in order to provide their children with the better life. All these commitments could be overwhelming to fulfill. It is great when people have someone in life to talk with and relieve the stress, or maybe ask for advice. That is why we make friends with others. Friends nourish our soul, prevent us from loneliness, and help us to deal with problems. For example, when I just moved to the United States I did not have any friends in this country. I felt lost. But when I got my first job in the U.S. in a pharmacy, my advanced social skills helped me to obtain new friends among my workmates. They have explained me the features of the American life, such as how to pay taxes and what the American healthcare system is like. In fact, because of the new friends, I was able to adjust to the new culture and the new environment pretty fast. On the contrary, if I had been working independently, I would not have met such as wonderful friends, and it would have taken a long time for me to adapt to the new circumstances. So, working in a team is a great way to build a new friendship.
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, if, may, second, secondly, so, for example, for instance, i feel, in fact, such as, as a result, in my opinion, on the contrary, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 81.0 52.1666666667 155% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2226.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 490.0 407.700716846 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.54285714286 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70488508055 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72176046123 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 254.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518367346939 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 708.3 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.1570022873 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.7586206897 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8965517241 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.55172413793 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.53405017921 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 22.0 11.8709677419 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.235014708916 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0621795433888 0.076458572812 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0871137827616 0.0737576698707 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.190601475116 0.150856017488 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0828016177288 0.0645574589148 128% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.4 11.7677419355 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.76 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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