A job with more vacation time but a low salary is better than a job with a high salary but less vacation time

Jobs are an important part of human life. Some people say a job with more vacation time is better than a job with a high salary but less vacation. However, I disagree that having a job with more vacation time is better than having a job with a high salary but less vacation time.
Firstly, high salary leads to a higher quality of vacation. Vacation takes time and money to enjoy. The higher the input, the higher the quality of the vacation. High salary could make it manageable to spend more money on the quality of the vacation. For example, comparing a person earning 100 dollar a month with a person whose profit is 1000 dollar a month; the latter has significantly higher money available to spend on vacation. When more money is used the quality of services provided increases.
Secondly, high salary could improve living standards. Vacation takes a small percentage in life. However, living standards is something that influences a huge percentage in life. When living standards improve, daily satisfaction increases. Therefore it will reduce daily stress. For example, people buy better quality of house and cars for better quality of life. This increases daily satisfaction for people.
In conclusion, a high salary provides more advantages than having more vacation. The higher quality of vacation and higher living standard is provided from the high salary.

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Average: 8 (2 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'dollar' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'dollars'.
Suggestion: dollars
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'dollar' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'dollars'.
Suggestion: dollars
...onth with a person whose profit is 1000 dollar a month; the latter has significantly h...
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Line 3, column 240, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
... improve, daily satisfaction increases. Therefore it will reduce daily stress. For exampl...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 6.0 43.0788530466 14% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 52.1666666667 44% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1147.0 1977.66487455 58% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 227.0 407.700716846 56% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05286343612 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.88156143495 4.48103885553 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58249743842 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 99.0 212.727598566 47% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.436123348018 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 370.8 618.680645161 60% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 20.1344086022 60% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.0214270938 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 63.7222222222 100.406767564 63% => OK
Words per sentence: 12.6111111111 20.6045352989 61% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.16666666667 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.479713329612 0.236089414692 203% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.15273265227 0.076458572812 200% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.223431113763 0.0737576698707 303% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.314487019134 0.150856017488 208% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.282856056968 0.0645574589148 438% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 11.7677419355 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.3 58.1214874552 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.12 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.01 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 86.8835125448 46% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.8 10.0537634409 68% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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