Many people visit museums when they travel to a new places Why do you think people visit museums Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

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Many people visit museums when they travel to a new places. Why do you think people visit museums? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

People take actions because of diverse reasons and, sometimes, it may be difficult to rationalize the reason/s why an individual has taken a particular action. However, I think the reason why a lot of people who visit a place, for the first time, attend the museums in such places is due to the following.
To start with, people have different tastes in all facets of life. What a man wants want to see is what another man doesn’t want to catch a glimpse of. However, there are some traits that connect all humans: the desire to come in close contact with extraordinary/rare objects is one of those traits. Museums are places where one can catch a glimpse at objects of diverse artistic and historical values. Some of these objects may not be present in any other part of the world. Therefore, people who travel to new places may find it very pleasing to go to the museum to see such unique objects. My personal experience is a perfect illustration of this. Recently, I travelled to Oyo, one of the ancient towns of the old Oyo empire. I had learnt from folklores and some history courses which I took when in high school, that the town is popular with wars and powerful warriors that had fought in mysterious ways. There is a symbolically primitive bow and arrow in the town's Museum- which many people in the town believe to have been the one used by one of their greatest warriors and archers (Lapade), that starts a fire on approaching the enemies. I was particulary interested in seeing it and fortunately for me, I saw the mysterious bow and arrow and some other relics of war preserved by the museum.
Furthermore, humans are gregarious animals and most people love making new friends particularly when they are in new environments. The museum serves as a good place to meet up with new people with similar tastes; most especially fellow travelers. These likelihood of hooking up with other people while concurrently enjoying the wide array of objects in display at museums, attracts travelers to the museum. For instance, one of the first places a sister of mine who went to the United Kingdom to further her studies visited was the Museum. When I asked her why she decided to go to the museum instead of focusing strictly on what she went there for, she answer that one of the factors that could make her focus was to settle in and make friends; and, of course, she made quite a few friends on her trip to the Museum in Newcastle.
Lastly, as inquisitive beings, people may find it attractive to visit museums in order to learn more about the culture of the local population. Museums serve as fertile grounds to educate oneself about the history and culture of the people in a society while satisfying one’s curiosity. In conclusion, I stongly believe people visit museums when they are in a new environment in order to meet new people, see unique objects and also educate themselves.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'this likelihood' or 'These likelihoods'?
Suggestion: This likelihood; These likelihoods
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Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'answers'.
Suggestion: answers
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, however, if, lastly, may, so, therefore, while, as to, for instance, i think, in conclusion, of course, to start with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 82.0 52.1666666667 157% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2390.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 510.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.6862745098 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75217629947 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62217497791 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 255.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 762.3 618.680645161 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.793381481 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.80952381 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2857142857 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.80952380952 5.45110844103 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.366573697644 0.236089414692 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104033334801 0.076458572812 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0842029703215 0.0737576698707 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.241090428178 0.150856017488 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0555558081672 0.0645574589148 86% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.22 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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