Many people visit museums when they travel to new places. Why do you think people visit museums?
Annually, many people travel around the world to see the new places and to create euphoric time in their life and to enjoy from different places with their family. Therefore, governments and organizations try flourishing tourism industry by gathering some historic objects from their countries in the museums in order to show people and attract them to come museums. A controversial question raises this issue is why people attend a new place they normally visit museums? In my opinion, I explain my reasons hereunder why people go to museums when they travel to new places.
The first reason comes to my mind is that people who come to the new place are unfamiliar with this place, so museums bring compact data to travelers in terms of getting general information about this place. Normally, museums reveal how indigenous people spent their time and what realm that they were experts such as mathematics, agriculture, and medical science. Additionally, travelers do not have enough time to visit all spots of a new place to be informed about this place, hence, museums provide concise helpful data to visitors. For example, when I visited a museum in the Rasht city, I realized how people lived this place used many medicinal plants to make traditional medicine for various diseases. They used sophisticated tools to extract medicine from these plants, and when I realized these modern methods in the short time, I admired them.
Another reason is that all people hear about precious objects, valuable statues and beautiful paintings have remained many thousand years ago or see the picture of these things on the Internet. Therefore, many of relics are persuaded people to see these objects with own eyes, so they go to museums and take many photos of these objects as surveillance for their family. Also, many people go to museums to increase their knowledge in their specialty field. In fact, these objects inspire them some idea about their work, and they learn from famous style to modify their artworks. For instance, many contemporary painters have been inspired by some traditional styles from the paintings of Leonardo Davin chi, the biggest painter in the world, in the famous museums, make its style in their paintings and improve their ability in their work eventually.
All in all, museums can help people traveling in the new place not only are familiar with this place in the short time but also are inspired by precious objects to improve their style in their field.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, so, therefore, for example, for instance, in fact, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2076.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 414.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01449275362 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51084139051 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 646.2 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 46.8869088576 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.4 100.406767564 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.6 20.6045352989 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.8 5.45110844103 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.356501880451 0.236089414692 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.150329027393 0.076458572812 197% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0989809502602 0.0737576698707 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.243702940203 0.150856017488 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.1151205207 0.0645574589148 178% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 11.7677419355 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 58.1214874552 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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