parents should encourage their teenage children to take part-time jobs
Even if people say that children cannot work for different reasons as young slavery or problems with their psychological development, I believe that parents have to encourage their siblings to have a soft part-time job and it would be really helpful. making money by their own efforts, kids can buy their toys, candies, and any other thing. By working, children learn how to deal with money. additionally, a part-time job helps them to achieve future dreams.
Since a child understands that money has a important value and that we need to work hard to gain it, he will face work differently. As we can see in poor countries, some youth need to help their families. Selling candies in a public transportation or walking in the streets, they can make money to help with home bills. Unfortunately, some of those kids will loose part of their childhood, but they will increase their sense about work.
Another really important point to let children have a part-time job refers to their experience on how to deal with money. teaching them to save and do not expand their savings, we provide better adults in the future. additionally, when we teach our children to work properly with their money, maybe we are avoiding problems with banks when they have to take care of their money by themselves.
Finally, just with a hard work we can have our dreams come true. Every one has a particular dream and I really believe that our job can help us to get it. Showing kids that work is the easiest and most honest way to achieve their dreams, we are putting them on the correct way.
To conclude, a part-time job is something helpful and will not disturb children's childhood. As many situations described before, kids can help their families, improve their knowledge on how to deal with money, and make their dreams true. Absolutely a easy work will not be dangerous for their development.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, if, may, really, so
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1563.0 1977.66487455 79% => OK
No of words: 326.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79447852761 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5929754672 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.530674846626 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 460.8 618.680645161 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.4282557804 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.9411764706 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1764705882 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.94117647059 5.45110844103 36% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.276658320536 0.236089414692 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10097457381 0.076458572812 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0884031195326 0.0737576698707 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176770675739 0.150856017488 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.104277109963 0.0645574589148 162% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.39 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 86.8835125448 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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