People should undergo surgery to look attractive do you agree or disagree

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People should undergo surgery to look attractive, do you agree or disagree?

undergo surgery to be more attractive?

It goes without saying that looking stunning is a good business because it opens doors of opportunities for humans..While some people feel awful about performing operations in order to look good, I strongly agree that people should go through surgery in order to look great.I feel this way for several reasons which i will develop in my body paragraphs.

To begin with, when individuals perform body operations it helps them correct their body defects. To explain broadly, a lot of people develop body deformities these days which could be as a result of childbirth, accident, bleaching cream e.t.c Therefore in order to get back their shape, they need to perform surgery so that they won't feel dejected among their loved ones or in the public. My personal example is a good illustration of this. Four years ago, I went through childbirth, and some month after I started developing visceral fats. This actually got me thinking because I couldn't go on occasions since I can't put on my fitted clothes anymore.Fortunately, I was surfing the internet and I came across a public figure that was in the same shoe as me. She narrated how liposuction helped her regain her normal shape. I got motivated with her story and I booked the surgery. While the surgery was about to start I was scared, yet I tried being courageous because of the celebrity success story. Eventually, the whole process was smooth, and I was able to return to my normal shape. Besides, I was able to move freely to any place of my choice without thinking about people's judgment regarding my look. If I hadn't done the liposuction, I wouldn't be comfortable moving around.

Furthermore, when people go through surgery, they look charming, which in turn makes it easier to get a job of one choice. To be more specific, for any recruiter, appearance really matters because they believe this will make their business grow. Coming from my previous example, the public figure also talks about the numerous endorsements she received after having the surgery. Infact, those that rejected her earlier now come back begging her with a huge amount of money. If she hadn't undergone the surgery, she wouldn't have received these tremendous endorsements.

In light of the reasons mentioned, I believe that individuals should go through operations in order to look good. This is because it helps one to get a perfect body shape and because it makes getting employment easier.

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Average: 7.6 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, besides, furthermore, if, look, really, regarding, so, therefore, while, i feel, as a result, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2066.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 416.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96634615385 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51620172871 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75736976442 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543269230769 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 639.0 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 76.895968685 48.9658058833 157% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.3 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.15 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.5376344086 253% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.140951699315 0.236089414692 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.04185737521 0.076458572812 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.074292586047 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125272200869 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.096463577701 0.0645574589148 149% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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