a person you know is planning to move to your town or city. What do you think that person would like and dislike about living in your town or city?

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a person you know is planning to move to your town or city. What do you think that person would like and dislike about living in your town or city?

I live in an industrial, beautiful big city with warm and hospitable people. Living in this city has both advantages and disadvantages. Personally, I believe its benefits are outweighed by its drawbacks. While, my friend, Maryam, may be in dilemma about living in my city. In what follows I will state some good and bad points of the city.
The city which I live in, is an industrial city with a large number of various factories located in the city. Due to this fact, finding job is not a matter in our city and every one can easily find a decent job related to their educations and their skills. So it is a big advantage that my friend should considered to make her decision. On the other hand, most of the factories operations are based on petroleum which is resulted air pollution and led to dusty clouds surround the city most of the time. And also increase respiratory disease and make breathing hard for people. Therefore, it can make my friend reluctant to choose the city to live in.
Additionally the city has many fancy restaurants and huge shopping malls and also it has many nice and beautiful places for people to spend their recreation times. For examples, there are many beautiful parks and a large number of excellent and authoritative museums in the city, and also they are easy access since public transportation are available in all part of the city to reach to these places. While, the bad point is that most of the resorts are extremely crowded especially on holidays. I know my friend really interested in visiting the museums and the parks but as she is an introverted person she doesn't like busy and crowded places. So it can be hard for her to opt these places for spending her leisure times.
Finally, the native people in the city are really warm and hospitable and also they are willing to lend a hand to you in crisis, particularly if they realize that you are a stranger in the city. And also they are happy people and always celebrate various festivals each month. So, personally, it is a big point to choose this city to live with such a kind and lively residents it has.
To make a long story short, the city which I live in, has many advantages for my friend, she can easily occupy in her favorite job, and also there are many beautiful places that she can spend her spare times in. While, as I mentioned, there are some drawbacks that may hesitated her over whether to live in this city or not.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
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Suggestion: Additionally,
...luctant to choose the city to live in. Additionally the city has many fancy restaurants and...
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...t of the city to reach to these places. While, the bad point is that most of the reso...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, if, may, really, so, therefore, while, for example, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1997.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 440.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.53863636364 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57997565096 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53246584665 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.456818181818 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 654.3 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.1066410433 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.0952380952 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9523809524 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.2380952381 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.142800944407 0.236089414692 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0456355923455 0.076458572812 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.03971924212 0.0737576698707 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0874240433154 0.150856017488 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0320440248733 0.0645574589148 50% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.05 10.9000537634 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.36 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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