Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them

There is a famous proverb- 'Time and tide wait for none'. Time is very valuable for a child as they have to learn a lot of things at their early life. Some people think that playing computer games is a waste of time for children, whereas, others think that children should play computer games for recreational means. In my opinion, playing computer games is a waste of time, hence, children should not be allowed to play them.

First of all, early time such as age around three to fifteen is very important for a person to learn a lot of things at that time. They have to learn about society, culture, value and most importantly, education. If a child does not study properly in his early time, it would be not possible to great in the future. Surely, there is no time for wasting time. For instance, one of the cousins used to spend a lot of times playing video games. He was so obsessed about playing games that he barely has time to go to school. For this reason, he failed to pass in the examination. Eventually, he dropped out of school. So, playing a game was like an addiction for him. Moreover, at a later time, he started gambling.

Secondly, computer games are indoor games. So, the person who used to play this kind of game generally do not go outside home. For this reason, they do not have many friends as well as they have little knowledge of outside. For example, when I was a child, I used to play a lot of computer games. I was so addicted to video games that I stayed home most of the time. So, when I left home for my honor's degree, I had many problems to cope with society and my friends. They loved to hang out a lot but, I do not like those ideas a lot. So, If I went outside a lot I could socialize myself with others.

In conclusion, children should not play computer games.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 535, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[4]
Message: “So , If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...t but, I do not like those ideas a lot. So, If I went outside a lot I could socialize ...
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, well, whereas, for example, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, such as, as well as, first of all, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1468.0 1977.66487455 74% => OK
No of words: 340.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.31764705882 4.8611393121 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.311106028 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 212.727598566 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.467647058824 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 465.3 618.680645161 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.1719708685 48.9658058833 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 63.8260869565 100.406767564 64% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.7826086957 20.6045352989 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.34782608696 5.45110844103 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.433788027071 0.236089414692 184% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.140909646645 0.076458572812 184% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.190602648365 0.0737576698707 258% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.344721970758 0.150856017488 229% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.183783900816 0.0645574589148 285% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.3 11.7677419355 54% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 58.1214874552 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.1575268817 63% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.18 10.9000537634 66% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.61 8.01818996416 82% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 86.8835125448 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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