The production and sale of cigarettes should be made illegal.
Big companies that provide cigarettes and sell this product shoul not be allow to keep on doing that. I totaly desagree with that quotes. Indeed, our society most value is to promote freedom and let anybody decide for his own.
First, to forbid the sale and production of it, would just increase blackmail without reducing the number of consumer. As it is known, human nature is such as if something is forbidden, he might do the opposite. Every drivers know that they have to respect speedlimits, but why so many of them receive a letter to pay a certain amount because of highspeed? In other words, if one’s try to limit what people are allowed to buy, consume or eather have to do, they will just stick to do what is forbidden. So, everyone should be free to decide whether he wants to do so or not, of course one’s the persone is old enough to decide. (157)
Indeed, children and minors should for sure not have access to that product. Teenagers that are under eighteen years old, should of course not be allowed to buy these products. However an age limit already exists nowadays. If you want to buy cigarettes anywhere it is ask to show an ID, in order to prove that you are old enough. Even if some teenagers succeed in getting some by using some tricky strategies. So, by the time you are eighteen, buying cigarettes should be part of you own decision, specially ones the consequences are clearly pictured on the cigarette box. (99)
By saying that a limited number of rules should exist does not mean that we have to let society lives totally free. Of course, without laws crimes and violence would be too present. This only means that, ty the time that risks and consequences are clearly showed, people should be free to decide whether they want to take these risks or not. (63)
To conlude, today society works as a free system where anybody can decide whether they want to smoke or not. For sure the behaviour of the youngest has to be limited by strict laws. However over-eighteen people should have the free choice to buy cigarettes. According to this way of thinking the more interdiction people have, the less they would want to obbey.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 80, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'keeping'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'allow' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: keeping
...nd sell this product shoul not be allow to keep on doing that. I totaly desagree with t...
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Line 1, column 228, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...dom and let anybody decide for his own. First, to forbid the sale and production...
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Line 3, column 213, Rule ID: EACH_EVERY_NNS[1]
Message: 'Each' and 'every' are used with singular. Did you mean 'all'?
Suggestion: All
...is forbidden, he might do the opposite. Every drivers know that they have to respect ...
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Line 3, column 443, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...at people are allowed to buy, consume or eather have to do, they will just stick ...
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Line 5, column 178, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...e not be allowed to buy these products. However an age limit already exists nowadays. I...
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Line 5, column 269, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'asked'.
Suggestion: asked
...u want to buy cigarettes anywhere it is ask to show an ID, in order to prove that y...
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Line 5, column 331, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[2]
Message: “Even if” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...order to prove that you are old enough. Even if some teenagers succeed in getting some ...
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Line 5, column 473, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'parted'?
Suggestion: parted
...e eighteen, buying cigarettes should be part of you own decision, specially ones the...
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Line 9, column 118, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ther they want to smoke or not. For sure the behaviour of the youngest has to be ...
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Line 9, column 184, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...ngest has to be limited by strict laws. However over-eighteen people should have the fr...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, so, as to, of course, such as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1783.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 385.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.63116883117 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40840435486 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.555844155844 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 554.4 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.0825328815 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.9047619048 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3333333333 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.33333333333 5.45110844103 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209489015064 0.236089414692 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0594381404242 0.076458572812 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0627924466463 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114305963011 0.150856017488 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0472770183465 0.0645574589148 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.57 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.56 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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