Question :Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Controversy exists over whether youngers are more dependent on their parents to make a decision for them or not. In my opinion, youngers, nowadays, have more freedom in decision making in comparison to the past.
The first reason to point out is that today young people are more independent to make the proper decisions. In the past, education was restricted to a certain section of society, and only young persons of wealthier families would have access to the best learning opportunities. At that time, for example, many young people from the middle class were given the advice to learn a profession and find a secure job. Some of them had to follow their parent’s jobs. But, today, free schooling is available and young people can pursue to choose a qualification based on their desires. Another great disparity is around the rule of relationships that are being eroded. Young individuals in higher education can make their own decisions about their friends and who and when to marry. In addition, when they become older, they may experience a change in the role of gender. They can make their own decisions which parental role each partner takes. In the past, the traditional role of men and women, as breadwinners and housewives, are no longer accepted asappropriate and necessary by younger generations. They could decide who stays at home and who goes to work depending on their personal preferences, and based on which partner earns more money.
Another more subtle point is that advances in technology can influence young people’s decisions. Our life has gone through great changes since technology came into being. It provides a new a different way for younger to make their own decision based on updated information. They can search for the best major which is applicable in the future and follow it in higher education. Furthermore, by using emails and services like Skype, they can make friends and find someone who shares a common interest in other countries. In this term, technological developments help teens to engage with more people from a huge variety of backgrounds. As a result, by exchanging and discussing over different subjects, they could make the best decisions in various aspects with regard to their futures, which would be impossible in the days before technological developments.
In conclusion, young people, nowadays, could make their own decisions without help from their parents because not only are they more independent, but also they have access to the more advanced technology. Now, who says youngers are more dependent on their parents for decisions making?
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, may, so, for example, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion, with regard to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2198.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 428.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13551401869 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.548423998 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78021282814 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525700934579 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 675.0 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.4867808517 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.9090909091 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4545454545 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.77272727273 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.380546976337 0.236089414692 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117535455025 0.076458572812 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0908689258198 0.0737576698707 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.263654970336 0.150856017488 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0426261794413 0.0645574589148 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.