Normally, students responsibility is to study only. However, these days, many teenagers have jobs or work while they study. Some of friends also have occupation after school or during vacation.I strongly believe that it is a good idea that teenagers have jobs while they are still students. I have two reasons which I will explore in this essay.
First of all, students can earn a salary if they work. Teenagers want to buy many things at that time; however, they do not have much money to buy them all. Therefore, they earn money themselves. For example, my friend Kim works at a restaurant every week or after school then, he gets salary. He buys something that he wants. Additionally, he buys present for his friends. In this way, after school, having a vocation is a good idea.
Secondly, a job will be an experience for teenagers’ life. Teenage students want to do many things in their old age. Therefore, when they work, they can have an idea about their major to take in the future. For example, my cousin wanted to be a public official so he took a test two times. While studying, he did part-time job like counting accounts. As a result, he thought that financial work matched him. Hence, he changed his major and now he is in the financial supervisory service.
In conclusion, lots of teenage students have jobs and also my friends have job. Job in that they can find their major in college and future job. In the other hands, they can use the money they earn themselves.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: After 'Some of', you should use 'the' ('Some of the friends') or simply say ''Some friends''.
Suggestion: Some of the friends; Some friends
...ers have jobs or work while they study. Some of friends also have occupation after school or du...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: I
...upation after school or during vacation.I strongly believe that it is a good idea...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e much money to buy them all. Therefore, they earn money themselves. For example,...
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Message: Use past participle here: 'jobbed'.
Suggestion: jobbed
...ents have jobs and also my friends have job. Job in that they can find their major ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...re job. In the other hands, they can use the money they earn themselves.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, then, therefore, while, for example, in conclusion, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 52.1666666667 50% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1233.0 1977.66487455 62% => OK
No of words: 264.0 407.700716846 65% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.67045454545 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03089032464 4.48103885553 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50515710051 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 145.0 212.727598566 68% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.549242424242 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 376.2 618.680645161 61% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 20.1344086022 60% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.7325254984 48.9658058833 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 58.7142857143 100.406767564 58% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 12.5714285714 20.6045352989 61% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.61904761905 5.45110844103 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.88709677419 266% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.296279677472 0.236089414692 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0929021980583 0.076458572812 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0809392938562 0.0737576698707 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.212259732636 0.150856017488 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0951091245018 0.0645574589148 147% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.9 11.7677419355 59% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 76.22 58.1214874552 131% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.6 10.1575268817 55% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 8.92 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.04 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 86.8835125448 54% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.8 10.0537634409 68% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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