In some countries, teenagers have jobs while they are still students. Do you think this is a good idea? Support your opinion by using specific reasons and details.
A job has tremendous significance in the life of each person. Having a good job gives people a feeling of safety, confidence in the future, and makes them satisfactory members of the society. In my view, in order to have an advantageous job in the future and satisfy with life, it is indispensable for students to work while studying. There are a few reasons, why I hold this opinion.
First of all, having a job by the students helps them get employed right after the graduation. If the students start working in the field they want to link their lives with, they have an opportunity to make pivotal connections with their future colleagues. For example, when I was a student of a pharmaceutical academy, I started working in a pharmacy as a pharmacy technician. I tried my best to show my knowledge and aspiration to become a professional. In fact, I was noticed by my employers and was offered an internship in the pharmacy I was working for, and later, a position of a pharmacist. Although all of my classmates, who did not work during the process of education, eventually were hired by different companies, it took much more time for them to find a job than for me.
Secondly, while working, the students gain crucial skills to grow as professionals. In a college, the students mostly learn only the theory, but they have no practice. This way, when the fresh graduates without work experience are getting their first jobs, they very often feel stressed out and disappointed. This is because they realize that the real work environment is quite different from what they have learned from books in a school. Conversely, the newly professionals, who are already familiar with the reality of the profession feel confident at the workplace and are not overwhelmed by the work`s routine. As you see, the skilled students have a great advantage in front of their inexperienced peers.
Finally, the working helps teenagers learn how to manage their time. For instance, when I had to work to support myself and study to become a pharmacist at the same time, I knew that in order to prosper in both, I had to make daily plans and follow them firmly, or get fired, or excluded from the academy. From that tough experience, I have learned how always to be on time at work and at the academy. These skills I use to this day and never have problems with being late anywhere.
To conclude, I strongly believe, that it is beneficial for the teenagers to have a job while they are still students. This is because it helps them obtain critical work experience, find a job of their dreams easily and handle their time effectively.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, conversely, finally, first, if, second, secondly, so, still, while, for example, for instance, in fact, first of all, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 9.8082437276 0% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2170.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 459.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72766884532 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62863751936 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83354252117 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507625272331 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 679.5 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Interrogative: 6.0 0.994623655914 603% => Less interrogative sentences wanted.
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.7578424727 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.6363636364 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8636363636 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.04545454545 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177659046503 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0609198214733 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0589907157399 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120654387173 0.150856017488 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0555376759883 0.0645574589148 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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