Some famous athletes and entertainers earn millions of dollars every year. Do you think these people deserve such high salaries? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

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Some famous athletes and entertainers earn millions of dollars every year. Do you think these people deserve such high salaries? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

Today, a media especially a social media is a trend, and several people follow, see, watch and like these activities. And, there are many options such as a sport games, a competition programs in these activities which following by audiences. And, the most parts of them affect people positively, so they would earn a high degree dollars.

First of all, all of these members of activities earn money regularly, some parts of them earn more than the others. Because, some of these athletes and entertainers have so many followers than the others. And, some supporters of these people make same things which done by these people, also some opponents would think them a role-model.

Also, productions of companies and factories need advertisement which designed by the media companies, and these tools which created by these companies would be presented by entertainer. That is a necessity, because all of these products had to been sold by companies. And, for affecting buyers they often use the media arguments such as t.v, an internet, a radio, entertainer too. And, for the best work they should prefer the best entertainer, and they have to give more money.

In addition, today there are so many health problems, such as a tuberculosis, a cancer, a obesite too. And, countries governments would consider these diseases for their residents' health. Then, they sometimes use athletes awakened people for their bad situations.

Furthermore, some places of the world have a shortage and a poor condition, all of them need aid from big countries. For that, there are different kinds of foundations created by the big countries to help the poor places and environments. For example, U.N is the big community which created after the world war two. The first mission of it is providing food to thee countries. Almost all of these foundations use a famous people who influence people rapidly. And, they give more money to them for entertain their aims.

In conclusion, taking account of all reasons and examples, some athletes and entertainers who used in everywhere should earn more money, because their effects more than the other. So, I definitely agree that statement.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a medium' or simply 'media'?
Suggestion: a medium; media
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'dollar'?
Suggestion: dollar
...ively, so they would earn a high degree dollars. First of all, all of these member...
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...lems, such as a tuberculosis, a cancer, a obesite too. And, countries governments...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: N
...places and environments. For example, U.N is the big community which created afte...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, if, so, then, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1835.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 357.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14005602241 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76441497055 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.50700280112 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 554.4 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.182001686 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.380952381 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.85714285714 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20322608709 0.236089414692 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0626070351403 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0557628489271 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115018846524 0.150856017488 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0477733108869 0.0645574589148 74% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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