Some parents forbid young children from owning smart phones (cell phones with Internet access), while others disagree and believe that they are important tools for keeping in touch. Which point of view do you think is better, and why?
Technology is changing the world today. Every person is tech savy and addicted to smart phones and most of us cannot live without them. I think that parents should forbid young children from owning smart phones. I believe this for two reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, children would get addicted to the smart phone and playing games on phone would replace other activities like playing outside with friends or coloring. When I was young, I used to love playing outside all day. If children get addicted to smart phones, children will not get physical exercise which is needed at the young age. For example, I know a friend whose daughter is 6 years old and she will not eat her food unless she is allowed to play games on her phone while her nanny feeds her. Her parents are at work all day and her nanny cannot get her to eat without a smart phone. In this way, kids are getting spoilt.
The second reason is that if the child knows how to use the internet, he may use it for completing her homework as well. So, the child would not use his brain and his mind would not get developed. When I was young and I had doubt about my homework, I would go to my mother or go through books to get the answer and in the process I would learn more. But today's generation wants the answer in minutes and have no patience. Also, children love watching television which is fine if they watch one or two shows per day. However, if they know how to use the internet on smart phone, they can watch shows on it alll day long. For example, I remember when my cousin was going to come over at my place and I was excited that I would get to play with my cousin. However, when she did come she was not interested in playing with me at all. She watched television shows on her smart phone all day and did not like the idea of playing outside.
In conclusion, parents should not allow children to own smart phones. This is because children get addicted to smart phones and do not play outside which is a necessity for physical exercise and they would use internet for wrong things as well.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, second, so, well, while, for example, i think, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1716.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 395.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.34430379747 4.8611393121 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.15305106898 2.67179642975 81% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.460759493671 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 513.9 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Interrogative: 3.0 0.994623655914 302% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.098747015 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.7142857143 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8095238095 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.2380952381 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.23347427161 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0799448587799 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0761752175778 0.0737576698707 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188945660219 0.150856017488 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0641685480748 0.0645574589148 99% => OK
automated_readability_index: 8.4 11.7677419355 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 78.59 58.1214874552 135% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.89 10.9000537634 72% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.33 8.01818996416 79% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 86.8835125448 52% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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