Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea?

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Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea?

In this present era it is highly competitive for students in schools as well as colleges in learning. Some people believe that rewarding their child for high marks with money will be good motivation while others have different opinion about that. I am totally against this idea. There are many reasons for my perspective as follows.

Firstly, giving kids money for the marks they gain is an easy way to reward if the parents are rich. But do the parents know how their students are utilising this money ? is it impossible to keep track of how the children use this money. Likewise, if the child gets a small amount initially they will start demanding more and the helpless parents need to provide them. Basically they are being fed with money rather than real inspiration to learn and reach great heights. Therefore, it is not a good way to motivate a child.

Secondly, the busy parents is unaware if the child takes illicit drugs in their life with the money provided . Excess amount of money without hard work can lead them to the wrong company. Moreover, youngsters may not recognise the difference between right and wrong ways in life. In this modern world there are a lot of distractions and negative pull from peers. if they do not understand this it will be very difficult to pull the child back to normal life. hence, it is not an excellent idea to teach kids with money.

Alternatively, if the child is being gifted with a trip to a distant land along with parents, it will be one of the best holidays in his life. Additionally, children in their growing age need to have enough love and care from their parents, not money. money cannot replace love it can only combat poverty. providing kids with small gifts and empowering them with knowledge would make them good citizens in the society. And this would be their best gifts.

To conclude, children should not be given money for the marks they gain. If this method is practised then it can lead to a generation which is a bad role model to the society. Hence, motivating students to learn by providing smaller gifts will be the best way .

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, hence, if, likewise, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, while, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1753.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 372.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.7123655914 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40162907674 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.524193548387 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 524.7 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.1574571578 48.9658058833 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.0416666667 100.406767564 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5 20.6045352989 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.95833333333 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.303835034574 0.236089414692 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0868028616224 0.076458572812 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0648018080492 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176783228333 0.150856017488 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0749110608313 0.0645574589148 116% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.5 11.7677419355 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 58.1214874552 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.74 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.22 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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