Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Identifying best methods to help students get better grades, is an important matter. There exist plenty of methods for it, one of which is offering money for each high score they get. Some may think that this is not a good idea since they would learn to be dependent on the money to get high scores, while others would disagree. In my opinion it is one of the best methods to encourage children to study more. I feel this way because of two important reasons which I will briefly introduce in the following paragraphs.
The main reason is that it motivates them to try harder and get better scores. Children, especially when they are younger, are not wise enough and cannot understand the importance of education. However, they need and like money, hence, it can be used as a prize which will make them to study more. For example, my little brother was not good at school at all. I proposed to my father to offer him money to get higher scores. He did this and as I was predicting, it really helped and encouraged him to try harder, and as a result, his GPA increased by a score of two.
Secondly, this offer teaches them to earn money instead of getting it for free. The children do not know how hard it is to earn money and just get pocket money from their parents for free. Offering money for their achievements would teach them that they can earn their money with doing some work. This way, they will also learn how to save or spend money more wisely, since they have tried and did something to earn it, so, they better know its value. For instance, my father was not giving me free pocket money since I was 10; He was used to ask me to do different simple tasks at home such as washing my plate after dinner, or arranging my drawer, and in exchange, he was giving me money. Hence, I have always done some tasks to earn money, and since they were difficult for me, I appreciate it more and learned to spend it just when it was needed.
To sum up, though some may disagree with my opinion, I deeply believe that offering money for getting high scores, is an effective method to help them get better scores. Not only does it encourage children to try harder and study more but also it teaches them how to save or spend their money. I think parents should dedicate some time to think on this and if they would think that it is a logical and beneficial method, try to do it.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'Identifying the best'.
Suggestion: Identifying the best
Identifying best methods to help students get better gra...
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Line 1, column 194, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'thinks'.
Suggestion: thinks
... for each high score they get. Some may think that this is not a good idea since they...
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Line 5, column 536, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[5]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'used to asking'.
Suggestion: used to asking
...ree pocket money since I was 10; He was used to ask me to do different simple tasks at home...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, briefly, but, hence, however, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, while, for example, for instance, i feel, i think, such as, as a result, in my opinion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 73.0 43.0788530466 169% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1939.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 445.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.35730337079 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59293186426 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.20949963802 2.67179642975 83% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.451685393258 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 602.1 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.5552644078 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.95 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.25 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.6 5.45110844103 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.32372797741 0.236089414692 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110593917281 0.076458572812 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0678833902059 0.0737576698707 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.214194740928 0.150856017488 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0279004162674 0.0645574589148 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.3 10.9000537634 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.89 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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