Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea?
It would not be exaggerating to say that in today's world parents play a remarkable role in their children's success and achievement. However, there is a controversy that parent how can be effective in their offspring's performance. Although some people think that giving money to low-old students is not an efficacious method, I, personally, do believe that this way is of great significance, two of which are increasing motivation, and making a sense of worth in students, which are elaborated upon hereunder.
To begin with, so far-reaching is the impact of motivation on the success that no one can deny it. As one philosopher, whose name eludes me at this time moment, once said, "Incentive is one of the most important agents for a person to become successful." In my opinion, the more motivation a person has, the more success he or she can achieve. The reason is that it can increase one's energy during difficult situations. When people have a motivation and think about what they can reach after their hard efforts, they tend to reconstruct their energy. However, with the lack of this "golden key" hardly can be guaranteed the perfect performance of children.
Additionally, the sense of worth can increase one's self-confidence. School is said to be one of the most important places where students' self-confidence begin to thrive. Having self-confidence not only can improve children's performance during school, but also can possibly bring more success for them in the future. On the other hand, a person without the sense of worth how can be useful for the society in general and for herself or himself in particular. Such a weak person are is afraid of failure and because of that cannot take a risk, which decreases the possibility of one's being helpfulness.
In the light of such crucial benefits, I strictly believe that giving money to children during school can be very useful. It not only can encourage them to have better performance at school but also can bring some advantages for their future life. Therefore, with so beneficial an idea we can improve our children performance for other activities.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, therefore, in general, in particular, in my opinion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1795.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 354.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07062146893 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33761313653 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06274229623 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.531073446328 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 566.1 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.4301362077 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.1875 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.125 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0625 5.45110844103 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180712902271 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0636764860732 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0452341493138 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123605483877 0.150856017488 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0428260006187 0.0645574589148 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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