Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea?

Nowadays, it is commonly accepted that parents and teachers should try to encourage young children to study in a way which they gradually became the self-motivated person in their life. Therefore, I, to a great extent, believe that it is good idea that parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade they get in school.

First and foremost, it is kind of prize to them which can create a positive feel in children minds as the consequence of their attempt. It is a usual tradition in the education system that encourage students for harder study and getting a better grade by offering different types of gifts or free travel or etc. Moreover, most high prestige universities provide several awards and scholarships to motivate talented students for harder study, invention and also attracting gifted people to study on these universities.

Another significant fact that should be taken into consideration is that by offering money as a prize, parents also could teach some other life skills to their children. For example, children learn that they should always have some goals and try to reach them. Obviously, goals give human reasons for living and continue to improve personality. Second, children learn how to manage their extra money which would be helpful in providing financially responsible adult people.

Finally, yet importantly, some criticizes of this view argue that by offering money to young children, they will never understand the real aim of education. However, I believe that it is not entirely true, because young children are so young to understand complicated means. Offering money is good way to teach valuable concepts in familiar ways to them.

On the basis of the reasons that were mentioned above, I am convinced that it is a true decision by some parents who offer their school-age children money for each high grade they get in school. Because it can motivate them for more study, and it is good opportunity to teach some other skills to them, and it is worth method to teach merit notions of life to young children.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, however, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, for example, kind of, to a great extent

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1736.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 344.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04651162791 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30665032142 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66217495674 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.520348837209 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 531.0 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.3970093862 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.0 100.406767564 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5714285714 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.64285714286 5.45110844103 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.452293441856 0.236089414692 192% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.15990827469 0.076458572812 209% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.176600998453 0.0737576698707 239% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.268810462206 0.150856017488 178% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.144062861851 0.0645574589148 223% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 11.7677419355 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200

Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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