From my point of view, it is not a good idea to award children with money for their accomplishments at school because it can affect children's attitude towards school and cause unrealistic expectations.
To start with, award system for children can negatively affect children's attitude to education. Education is an important part of a child and requires effort to learn more. Parents have a crucial role in a child's success at school, and many parents use different ways to support them. When it comes to awarding a child for every high grade, even though it seems reasonable for a child, it can change child's attitude towards success. What I mean is that if a child get awarded by money for a good grade, his purpose will evolve to get money instead of getting a good score. One of my friend in high school, for instance, got awarded with remarkable amount of money when he gets the best score in the class. However, after a while his aim has changed to get best score, not learning new things, and he started to cheat to reach his goals. A recent study conducting a university in the US has revealed that using an award system in a student's education cause psychological problems later on.
Another point to consider is that children can expect an award for everything they achieved later on life. Life is full of challenging situations and one may face many different choices. Children who are used to get awarded by their parents have an approach to get awarded even in the work life. For example, one of my coworker in the company I worked couple of years ago had a tendency to see some satisfaction from others. To be more specific, she was expecting others to thank her every time she did her work. She was not able to see the fact that she is her responsibility to make work done.
To sum up, it is better not use an award system since it has a negative impact on children such as wrong evaluation of the importance of education and expanding expectations.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: students'; student's
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Suggestion: many
...challenging situations and one may face many different choices. Children who are used to get a...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...en in the work life. For example, one of my coworker in the company I worked coup...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, so, while, for example, for instance, i mean, such as, to start with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1622.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 352.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.60795454545 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33147354134 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62855794886 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.53125 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 517.5 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.46323902 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.375 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0625 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.241468422 0.236089414692 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0787124210115 0.076458572812 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0726636540437 0.0737576698707 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144831335351 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0779370910484 0.0645574589148 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.46 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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