Some people believe that employment over the age of 60 is not right and creates lots of problems. So people should retire after 60 and not work.agree/disagree

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Some people believe that employment over the age of 60 is not right and creates lots of problems. So people should retire after 60 and not work.
agree/disagree

A retirement is the term that can show us different things such as countries economic features, people's employment successes, living conditions etc.For that, some people want to get the retirement early and others not.

First of all, the employment rate is always important.Because if there would be many people who has not a job there could be a lot of problems which caused by people.So, governments of countries always interested in that problem and they concentrate dropping unemployment rate down greatly.For decreasing that rates they use different methods and the one approach is encouraging people to retirement.

Also, after 60 years old people would be older and their immune system could be weaker.So, they might be in different illness situations and they will have various sick problems.For that reason, these types of people do not travel enough and they have to solve their health problems.I think retirement means people that many travelling, many walking, and several different positive feelings.So,if people want to feel these kind of good varieties senses they should retire as soon as possible.

In addition, average living ages are different in world's countries, especially high in developed countries such like USA,UK,Germany etc.The peak age usually 80 or 85 in countries without Africa,some part of The north America and the north Asia.After sixty years old there would be twenty or twenty-five years old for life.All people in these countries should retire early because there are not enough schedule.

In my opinion, we can say different reasons, but taking account off all above's reason, human should retire at the age of sixty.And i agree that situation clearly and definetly.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, i think, in addition, kind of, such as, first of all, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 52.1666666667 52% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1447.0 1977.66487455 73% => OK
No of words: 270.0 407.700716846 66% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.35925925926 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05360046442 4.48103885553 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87305489757 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 212.727598566 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.611111111111 0.524837075471 116% => OK
syllable_count: 432.0 618.680645161 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 20.6003584229 24% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 54.0 20.1344086022 268% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 121.145202134 48.9658058833 247% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 289.4 100.406767564 288% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 54.0 20.6045352989 262% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 18.6 5.45110844103 341% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 20.0 5.5376344086 361% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.260949333761 0.236089414692 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.133846567836 0.076458572812 175% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0532155793546 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133846567836 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0532155793546 0.0645574589148 82% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 30.8 11.7677419355 262% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 16.67 58.1214874552 29% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 6.10430107527 213% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 24.4 10.1575268817 240% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 14.7 10.9000537634 135% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.29 8.01818996416 128% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 10.002688172 195% => OK
gunning_fog: 23.6 10.0537634409 235% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 24.0 10.247311828 234% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200

Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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