Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, people have very few time to live with their private life. Most of time they spend their time in their work and rarely can give their time with their family. On the other hand, children are also have to face daunting academic task on increasing grade where they barely have enjoyable time. personally, I prefer to spend my leisure time with my children to play game and other activities to cherish them up.
First of all, playing with children, whenever people have extra time, can build the close relationship between them. playing brings to share excitement, tension, fun and many more emotional expect with the children. Furthermore, children not only have less hesitation with their parents to share a lot of their new life experience but also consult with their parents in their minute decision. As a result, it brings more happiness and satisfaction in the family. For example, me and my parents were used to be engaged in the game or any other things when we both had free time. this brought me habit of comfort with my father all the time and every time if I have to need suggestion, I will ask him without hesitation. Moreover my relationship with my father is that good we live like a friend rather than son-father relation with love, empathy and respect.
secondly, both parents and children can relief their pressure by playing game with each other. Indeed, parents have work pressure while children have their academic pressure but, discussing in free time only about the outer subject may not be that fruitful to both. However, playing game can be fantastic way to escape from this hectic moment at least for mercurial time where they can rejuvenate themselves to carry out their later same enervating work. On the other hand, if people become concentrated in their children' academic part, both's time will passes with vapidly. this brings no refreshment in the mind, causing less efficiency in work and study for parents and children respectively. Since, playing brings new energy in the person, its necessity is paramount for fatigable family.
In conclusion. beside duty, happiness and enjoyment are necessary in the life of human especially the people who have very drab life style. if parents give enough time to their children in recreational activities, great bond in relation between them. Altogether utopian life will be possible for the family.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, while, at least, for example, in conclusion, as a result, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2010.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 398.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05025125628 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46653527281 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50656192936 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522613065327 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 621.9 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.5437127167 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.5 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.5 5.45110844103 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.396448244588 0.236089414692 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.126834728163 0.076458572812 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0819250130017 0.0737576698707 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.261537112182 0.150856017488 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0914258621989 0.0645574589148 142% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.55 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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