Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to

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Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

One of the most important responsibilities of parents is to spend adequate amount of time with their kids. They should pay attention to train successful children who have several necessary skills to live in society. Some people believe that parents who don't have enough leisure time to spend with their kids should use their limited time on playing with children, whereas some others hold an opposite attitude. In my view, it is better that parents spend time on their children education for two remarkable reasons.

The main reason is that there are some problems in children's schoolwork that parents can spend time with their kids to teach them how solve them. Children have a lot of friends to spend their leisure time with them to have fun or play with each other. However, as their friends have the same level of knowledge as them, parent’s role in helping their kids in their school works problem is more required. For example, when I was in high school I always have problem in solving my math question. Although I had a lot of friend, none of them could help me. Since my parents always were busy and worked hard to provided me more welfare, they had little time to spend with me. One day I ask my father, who was a mechanical engineer to help me in my math assignments. Surprisingly, I noticed that he taught math very fluently that not only I could learn well, but I also enjoy the time studying besides my father. If my father had not spent time on my assignments, I wouldn't solve my problems.

Second, by spending time on kid’s schoolwork, parents could provide their children with better future. In today progressive world, people who are well-educated have more opportunity to find well-paid job that provide them with convenience life. Therefore, spending time to increase kids level of education has positive effect on their future success. For instance, statistics demonstrate that there is a direct relation between kid’s prosperity in future life and the time they spend with their parents on their school assignments. Researchers' investigation among two groups of children reveals that children spending more time with their parents on their school work could progress better in their education due to using their parents experience that give them vast knowledge and turn them to experts in their fields. Furthermore, because today's teachers don't have enough time to spend on each student, parents should really pay more attention on their kids’ education. As you can see, spending time with parents on schoolwork has several benefits.

In conclusion, I do believe that the advantages of spending time on children education overweight the benefits of spending time on playing with kids. Not only can parents teach children to solve their problems easily, but they also increase their children chance to become successful in future. I think that all parents should pay more attention on their kid’s education.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: don't
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Suggestion: a lot of friends
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Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put after the verb 'were'.
Suggestion: were always
...of them could help me. Since my parents always were busy and worked hard to provided me mor...
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Suggestion: don't
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, furthermore, however, if, really, second, so, therefore, well, whereas, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, in my view

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 72.0 43.0788530466 167% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2482.0 1977.66487455 126% => OK
No of words: 490.0 407.700716846 120% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06530612245 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70488508055 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64681289333 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.440816326531 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 737.1 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.2578534114 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.913043478 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3043478261 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.65217391304 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.408513746563 0.236089414692 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.14779387931 0.076458572812 193% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.109771356082 0.0737576698707 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.300188061658 0.150856017488 199% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0605204808641 0.0645574589148 94% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.45 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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