Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Parent is the one who play an important role in forming a meaningful family. However, they usually being busy to working to fulfil family’s happiness leading to the debate that if they have free time with their children, they should whether playing games or sport with kids or doing the schoolwork stuff. In my opinion, the second choice brings back more memory and makes more interact with children.
To begin with, doing schoolwork relation remind human about the most wonderful period life of time. Accomplish high school starts a new journey which is extremely challenging in lifetime since people have to struggle in finding job or earning money. Working is never become comfortable for human when they have to face many stresses issue such as co-worker, deadline, company pressure. Therefore, doing school work somehow recover our sense of being student since parent will feel the time regarding they used to be their kid leading to the releasing in workings tension and recover our memorable time. For example, I usually hear about my father story as to his student life and I feel it really amazing when wrapping my school book can help him comeback to the unforgettable moment in life.
Furthermore, through working with children in school concern, parent can understand their kid more deeply. Children take most time on school activities which means that their characteristic will be formed in their school life. Hence, parent have to share some experience with their children in order to get into kids world which support parent in teaching and become a outstanding imitation for them. As a result, doing school related is a excellent way to approach them. Take my parent again as a compelling example. I had a struggling time with my school time. During helping my math problem, he easily found out the different in my emotion; therefore, he shared story with me result in the better in my emotion.
In the end, if parent have a free time with their children, doing school work will be the wonderful choice.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, hence, however, if, really, regarding, second, so, therefore, as to, for example, i feel, such as, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1695.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 340.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98529411765 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50746118448 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.55 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 508.5 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.5048378013 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.9375 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.25 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.5625 5.45110844103 175% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.295493306798 0.236089414692 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107053444974 0.076458572812 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0778325880912 0.0737576698707 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.215220807089 0.150856017488 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0313873114058 0.0645574589148 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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