Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to sc

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Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

It is critically important that parents manage their schedual to find some free time to spend with their chirdren. Personally, I believe it would be better that parents allocate this time on having fun with their children instead of working on school assignments. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.

To begin with, in this modern era, methods of education have completely changed rather that the past, and parents are not be able to guide their child properly because they are not aware of new means of learning or even some of them cannot be able to solve their children problems. Therefore parents should let the teachers to help children in their lessons and they sould not interfere in this part of their children's lives. My personal experience is a compelling illustration of this. My little brother, who is 10 years younger than me, came to me and ask me a question from his assignment many weeks ago. Although I have master degree in chemistry, I could not solve the problem right away, and after struggeling with that I told something that he did not think that I did not know about that chemistry problem. The next day of that day, he went to his teacher, and the teacher told him that his answer was completely wrong. After that day, I decided to do not help him in his assignment because I am not aware of the new methods education.

Secondly, children need to have some fun time with their parents to satisfy their mental desires, and releive their stress. During day, parents are drastically busy by they hectic daily schedules that do not let them to have some fun time with their children, so it would not be logical that they allocate their few free time on school works of their children, because children have other needs than education that parents must meet them, for example going to a trip, playing with children, taking them to shop, speaking them, and so on. If parents just care about their children education lives, they can not build a close-knit family, which introduce healthy and effective people to the society. Also children are full of stress because of their serious school life, and the only way to releive their stress is jumping out from their education lives even for many hours that parents can provide them this flee time.

In conclusion, I am of the opinion that parent should spent their free time on having fun and entertainment with their childs. This is becuse parents are not eligible person to help their children in their lessons anymore due to changing in education system, and parents must meet their childrens needs in other areas than education as well.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'been'.
Suggestion: been
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Suggestion: Therefore,
... able to solve their children problems. Therefore parents should let the teachers to help...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'methods'' or 'method's'?
Suggestion: methods'; method's
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Suggestion: Also,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, even so, for example, i feel, in conclusion, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 81.0 43.0788530466 188% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2201.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 464.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74353448276 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64119157421 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36573836399 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.474137931034 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 653.4 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 84.3724768141 48.9658058833 172% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.5625 100.406767564 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.0 20.6045352989 141% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.6875 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.301809687542 0.236089414692 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113395167722 0.076458572812 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100037321356 0.0737576698707 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.214886109008 0.150856017488 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0734583501519 0.0645574589148 114% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 11.7677419355 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.96 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.2 10.1575268817 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.8 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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