Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Recently, there is a ton of debates on how busy parents should spend their limited free time with their children.I am of the opinion that it is better to enjoy that time by playing games or sports with children, rather than doing schoolwork. I feel this way because of two reasons, which I will explore in this essay.
First of all, playing games or sports can increase the intimacy between parents and their children. Playing games and sports provide an opportunity for children to enjoy a break from the heavy school workload, and for parents to escape from their tedious social life as well. Consequently, all participants can have a good time. For example, when I was in primary school, my parents usually took to the park and play football together, which was my favorite exercise at the time of period. During the games, we did not just play, but talk about my personal life and academic performance in school, which made me feel close to my family and have the urge to communicate with them. This demonstrates that participating a family event can enhance the relationship among the members.
Secondly, children have got enough help for their schoolwork from other source nowadays. With the development of modern technology, children can easily get in touch with their teachers and ask for assistance with their work through text messages, phone calls, or even video chats. Internet is another important tool for children to address issues which they have difficulty in understanding, and they can find even more detailed formation that could help them understand the subjects deeply. This is best demonstrated by my own experiences. Last year,with the prevalence of the Covid, children in my city are required to take classes at home, including my nephew. To make sure this could go smoothly, the school invited an online system from which the students could contact with the teachers at any time , submit their homework and get them graded through it quickly. I am so amazed by how the modern technology can be utilized in education. Therefore, there is no need for parents to help their children with schoolwork any more.
In conclusion, I am fully convinced that parents should spend their spare time with children playing games or sports instead of doing schoolwork related things. This is because having fun with children can intimacy among family members and because it is not necessary for them to help children with schoolwork.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for example, i feel, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2043.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 409.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99511002445 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61614103828 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533007334963 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 607.5 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.6712961105 48.9658058833 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.5 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7222222222 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.294049190011 0.236089414692 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100922214016 0.076458572812 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0888623936044 0.0737576698707 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.220419705383 0.150856017488 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0563358802392 0.0645574589148 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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