Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Since the dawn of civilization, parents have played a prominent role in each individual's life and have been widely considered to be a vital factor in reaching success. In such a sophisticated world in the modern era, parenting has been not only nurturing and nature but also supporting children in many aspects of their lives. The disputatious question which arises in this regard is whether it is more convenient for parents who have hectic daily schedules and cannot spend sufficient time with their children to use that time to play games or aid their children in their schoolwork. Although some people are the leading proponent of the former, I firmly contend that the latter's advantages carry more weight. In what follows, I will elaborate on two reasons to elucidate my standpoint aptly.
First and foremost, should parents use their spare time helping their children with their schoolwork, they can detect their children's not only weaknesses but also talents. Spending time with children provides parents with a great opportunity to monitor their children's educational performance. Take seven years old boy as an example, and lets us assume that his parents aid him in doing his math assignment. If he cannot do any basic math operations by himself, his parents know that math is an area in which the boy needs development. In addition, supervising children gives parents an opportunity to unearth their children's prowess; consequently, they can help children cultivate their talents. As an illustration, consider my personal experience as an example. When I was five years old, I understood perplexing math questions and answered them; accordingly, my parents bought more mathematics books or helped me flourish in my math ability before starting school. Consequently, I joined the school's math team and got the gold medal in the math exam in my country. One can conclude that this tells us that parents' contribution to children's success is far more than the others.
Another reason is that parents help children enhance their educational performance by assisting them with schoolwork-related. Indeed, parents are the most trustworthy persons in each individual's life, in whom they, without any doubt, can confide. Parents put as much effort as they can into helping their children in their education. In addition, parents have the ability to emotionally support their children in a way that makes them wind down and feel more relaxed. Therefore, Children can relieve the stress imposed by the hectic daily schedules they have in order to keep track of lessons discussed in their classes. Hence, they gain good vibes to stay productive in their classes. As an example, one can point out the recent and comprehensible research done at the Center of Educational Studies at the University of Tehran. Some Eminent researchers have concluded that parents' aid in assignments far more contributes to children's educational performance than the others. This shows us that parents can help children get higher grades in their final exams.
To sum up, pondering all the aforementioned reasons, one can surmise that helping children with schoolwork is a better option than playing games with them. This is because it not only gives a chance to discover children's weaknesses and talents but also contributes to their educational performance. All in all, it is anticipated that parents will spend much less time with their children, which can lead to irreparable repercussions in their family relationships. Moreover, it is not an entire story, and there are other reasons that challenge my standpoint. Thus, I recommend that a survey evaluating the effectiveness of points is held.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 78, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...ts have played a prominent role in each individuals life and have been widely considered to...
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Line 2, column 995, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'schools'' or 'school's'?
Suggestion: schools'; school's
...ting school. Consequently, I joined the schools math team and got the gold medal in the...
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Line 3, column 183, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...re the most trustworthy persons in each individuals life, in whom they, without any doubt, ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, consequently, first, hence, if, moreover, so, therefore, thus, in addition, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 75.0 43.0788530466 174% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3089.0 1977.66487455 156% => OK
No of words: 591.0 407.700716846 145% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22673434856 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.93056706295 4.48103885553 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.938822783 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 300.0 212.727598566 141% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507614213198 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 934.2 618.680645161 151% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.0733688614 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.321428571 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1071428571 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.89285714286 5.45110844103 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.261289603978 0.236089414692 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0747016121314 0.076458572812 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0728753470279 0.0737576698707 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183162049078 0.150856017488 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0482148862987 0.0645574589148 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.93 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 159.0 86.8835125448 183% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 10.002688172 185% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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