Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer?
Nowadays, parents have less time to accompany with their children due to busy work. Their time management has become an important thing to deal with. Some says that when the busy parents have time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have games or sports while others says to spend on things related to schoolwork. In my opinion, I prefer playing games or sports at their free time for three reasons.
First, parents can feel relief and feel cozy when they are playing games or sports, too. Busy parents usually handle lots of work and under high stress. They devote themselves to their work and always do their best to reach the requirement. Their working environment can not provide them enough rest and not to mention playing games or sports. The rest time after working, these busy parents may want to have a relaxing time with their children and making a great family memory. By playing games or sports with their children can satisfy both wishes.
Second, children can get along with their parents and enhance their family relationship. Busy parents usually spend most of their time on working, they put most efforts on their work rather than their children. I used to read a research states that the much time the parents get along with their children, the close their family relationship. To the busy parents, the leisure time spent on children with relaxing and interesting things is much more important than doing boring schoolwork.
Third, the use of their time on playing will make both parents and children improve the efficiency on their work and schoolwork. Because time is very precise, the distribution of time will affect how other resources use. Parents and children should finish their work on time so they will become more efficient.
In concluded, I prefer the approach that the best use of the time that busy parents spent on their children is to have fun playing games or sports.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, may, second, so, third, while, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 15.1003584229 33% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1611.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 332.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85240963855 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.2685907696 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.29685413176 2.67179642975 86% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 212.727598566 68% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.433734939759 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 463.5 618.680645161 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.8911879827 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.5 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4444444444 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.11111111111 5.45110844103 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.541353226222 0.236089414692 229% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.209663877898 0.076458572812 274% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.121899289234 0.0737576698707 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.37826139712 0.150856017488 251% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.101775607892 0.0645574589148 158% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.76 8.01818996416 84% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 86.8835125448 54% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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