Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games and sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It is incontrovertibly axiomatic that in the hectic life of today parents do not have as much time as the parents in the past had. As we all know, parents have many responsibilities toward their children, and to meet all this tasks they need spend a lot of time with them. But, having less time make them to allocate this precious time more wisely to satisfy the needs of their children. As far as the alloting this time is concerned, some are of the opinion that it should be consumed in playing with children, while others believe that helping them in school works are of more consequences. I-for one- subscribe to the first idead on the ground that children have emotional needs, they can do their assgnment by other ways, and they can promote a better relationship with their parent.
To begin with, emotional need is one of the most critical facets of their basic requirements. By spending time with children with having fun and recreation, they feel happy and associate this joufulness with being in company of their parents; So they emotional needs are satisfied. Fuethermore, children like this more than other kind of spending time. For example, my best memories of my childhood have to do with the time we went to amusement parks all together with my family.
Second, there is other ways to solve problems of student in school studies, which can be more effective than help of the parents. For instance, they can hire a tutor for their children to assisst them in their schoolworks. Also, being with their classmates in some time would help them to be more resourceful about their lessons. Therefore, parents can use their time in other ways than helping them in doing assignments.
Last but not leat, playing with children is prerequisite for having a good relationship for them. In the world of today that teenagers are more disobedient and it causes many future problems in families and as a result in societies, be a friend of children for parents could be signifcantly effevtive to frustrate these consequences. Thus, spending more time with children in playing games and sports would be beneficial both for the family and society.
All in all, taking into account what was already mentioned, I do believe that using the limited time of parents in having fun with their children is more better than doing schoolwork with them, because of emotional need of children, existing other ways of helping them in their study, and making a good bond with the young people. Nowadays, children have a desperate need of playing with their parents.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'there are other ways'?
Suggestion: there are other ways
...s all together with my family. Second, there is other ways to solve problems of student in school ...
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Message: Use only 'better' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: better
...ts in having fun with their children is more better than doing schoolwork with them, becaus...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ork with them, because of emotional need of children, existing other ways of help...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, for instance, kind of, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2120.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 437.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85125858124 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57214883401 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63584173697 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.453089244851 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 636.3 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.9086727831 48.9658058833 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.777777778 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2777777778 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.66666666667 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.417781682648 0.236089414692 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.160208442303 0.076458572812 210% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0774669119877 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.264831525229 0.150856017488 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0864810534025 0.0645574589148 134% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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