It is the destined responsibility on the part of the parents to provide their children with the most reasonable guidelines for the purpose of help become mature and successful. When thinking about the issue that parents should spend more time on games or schoolwork, different people will have different ideas. Some people are in favor of spending on games, while others believe schoolwork are more reasonable. It's hard to judge which has more significance. In my perspective, I prefer the first one, for the following reasons:
First of all, if parents constantly play games with their children but take no interest in their studies, then parents are setting a bad example for their kids.
That’s because if a child sees his or her patents take great interest in playing games but none in going over homework, then that kid may end up feeling that homework is not essential. For example, my nephew’s school performance doesn’t reach his full potential, and in my opinion, this can be largely attributed to the fact that his father makes sure to play football with his son regularly, but never sits down and helps with his work. So parents ought to be awareness of that they should raise their kids’ awareness on study.
Furthermore, not only is parents’ highlight on study pivotal factor in affecting children’s attitude, it’s also beneficial to increase the probability of finding a satisfactory job. It should be abundantly clear that kids who study hard are more likely to make progress in their future careers. This phenomenon can be greatly attributed to the fact that interviewers prefer to provide chance to these people who got remarkable grades in school. On the contrary, youth who are lack of excellent performance in school will be more likely to overwhelmed and struggle to deal find a job after they graduated. From this view, parents must emphasize work over play, in order to ensure a young person’s future career success.
Besides, youth who study harder are likely to be successful in their career. That’s because such ability is found in many famous figures, especially those world-renowned business leaders. For instance, Larry Page, the former CEO of Google Co.Ltd, could be referred to as an outstanding example who studied hard at school. He was diligently at Stanford University and eventually got the master degree of computer science. So parents should encourage their kids to study hard and finish homework daily for the purpose of paving the way for their personal success .
In a nutshell, parents’ necessary guidance in schoolwork can bring in in serious learning attitude, satisfactory job and the stepping stone towards success. Judging from all the above mentioned situations, we may reach the conclusion that parents should pay more attention to children’s course assignments.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, furthermore, if, may, so, then, while, for example, for instance, first of all, in my opinion, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2419.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 460.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25869565217 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6311565067 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92865589123 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 261.0 212.727598566 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.567391304348 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 738.0 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.8614539706 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.95 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.85 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.147052096739 0.236089414692 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0457304948606 0.076458572812 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0538697852332 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0877631215786 0.150856017488 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.068907619386 0.0645574589148 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 11.7677419355 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 10.9000537634 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 86.8835125448 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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