Some people like to keep a record of their own experiences by uploading pictures and other information to social-networking sites. Other people prefer not to create such records.Which approach do you prefer, and why?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Throughout history, human beings have tried various ways to record their memories and experiences. Some of these ways are writing diaries, painting pictures, or making photo albums. Nowadays, technology development has made it much easier for us to keep and share our photos and information by providing online platforms such as social networking sites. Personally speaking, I prefer to upload my pictures and information and share it with other people. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, sharing personal experiences with other individuals strengthens our relationships with them and helps us develop new friendship bonds. When people see our pictures and read about our experience, they may relate to our feeling, express their comments, or talk to us about it, which will improve closeness and understanding. Also, they can change our perspective by mentioning their own experience or opinion. For instance, last year I decided to go on a trip to Shiraz. I uploaded a picture of Shiraz on my social account to tell everyone about my upcoming trip. After an hour, one of my followers who lived in Shiraz sent me a message and gave me some information about the best places in Shiraz that I must see. She also suggested being my tour guide. I happily accepted her suggestion, and that trip became one of my best travel experiences. Uploading a picture helped me find a new friend and have a fun trip.
Secondly, it is wise to have our memories recorded. Our brain is bombarded with a large amount of information every day. However, it cannot store everything we experience in our lifetime due to its limited memory capacity. Therefore, we gradually forget many memories and their details, and this process is inevitable. Maintaining pictures and information by uploading them on online platforms is a convenient approach to keep our memories and protect them from vanishing.
In conclusion, I believe that keeping a record of photos and personal information on social sites is a good idea. This is because it helps us develop and reinforce our relationships with others, and it is an easy approach to keep our memories.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1824.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 364.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01098901099 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87944067513 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.568681318681 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 575.1 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.0493030996 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.8571428571 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3333333333 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.80952380952 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199725365398 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0562692461921 0.076458572812 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0535251138638 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125764139755 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0417616675408 0.0645574589148 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.48 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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