Some people suggest that it is wrong to give money to beggars asking for money on the street while others think that it is the right thing to do Which point of view do you think is correct and why

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Some people suggest that it is wrong to give money to beggars asking for money on the street, while others think that it is the right thing to do. Which point of view do you think is correct, and why?

There are a ton of beggars who ask for a money from others. The important question is whether we should give money to these people. Personally, I believe that individuals should help the poor by giving money. I have two main rationales for holding this opinion, and I will develop these ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.

To begin with, we can help beggars to find food to eat, shelter to spend nights, so crime activities will diminish. Beggars are begging for money because they do not have an enough amount of money to purchase meals and houses. However, if they stop receiving money from others in streets, they will seek another way of earning money. Unfortunately, most employers are unlikely to hire these individuals because of their education, and previous life experience. Therefore, they are liable to commit crimes such as shoplifting, even robbing, or bullying in order to buy snacks and avoid dying from starvation. As a result, citizens will be subject to crimes, in turn, fear caused by these problems. To sum up, giving money to beggars is the simple way of reducing an extent of crime in our civilizations.

Secondly, folks can improve their emotions and feelings by giving money to beggars. Most people including me relieve their stress by helping other people because we can feel as if we are useful in society, which leads to fine atmosphere within society. Fortunately, giving money to beggars can be the most simple and appropriate mean of helping others. On the other hand, people will keep being overwrought if they do not help others. For instance, last year, I had been distraught, not to say suicidal, because I thought that I am useless in this world. Nevertheless, I comprehended that I can be useful in society after giving my money to children who were begging for money at downtown. Consequently, I could stop being miserable by just giving several dollars to beggars. Long story short, citizens can diminish their anxiety by sharing their excess bucks with beggars.

In summation, I am of the opinion that giving money to beggars can be advantageous to whole society and people who are giving money to them. This is because helping them will encourage them not to be involved in underworld activity, and people will mitigate their depression.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, however, if, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, therefore, for instance, such as, as a result, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1903.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 385.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94285714286 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70497252673 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.524675324675 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 585.0 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 26.9275503996 48.9658058833 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 90.619047619 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3333333333 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.28571428571 5.45110844103 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.23403121379 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0818371192448 0.076458572812 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0682358536957 0.0737576698707 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158896744062 0.150856017488 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0166625309676 0.0645574589148 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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No one can deny that there are both positive and negative aspects of giving money to beggars. In my point if view, giving money to beggars is a correct. It is my firm that giving money for beggars is a correct thing to do for a number of reasons, and I will develop these ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.
First of all, you never know what the beggar will do with your money, but, if you see that he or she is asking money to buy something essential, like food, I wouldn’t think twice and give the money to him or his. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my personal experience, when I was in Brazil, I was leaving a restaurant, when a beggar stopped me, and asked me some money to buy food, I give him the money, and when I looked back, he was drinking bear. After this, I think twice before give money to a strange person. In contrast, all the other times that some bagger asked me some money, I always got into the supermarket with that person, to see what he or she needs to buy, and if this think was essential, I bought it.
Secondly, you never know that person is there, what he or she passed, and what that person is feeling, so giving money, would definitely help. Let me use the example above, that beggars that I helped, immediately when I bought what they really need, I could see the smile in their faces, and that, was the most valuable thing that a person could receive.